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artist of broken hearts
even in her sublime pose
I know of her inner firestorm & brass
like a tempest incarcerated in a ball of glass
I’ve tasted the burning flesh of war
but it didn’t fry my palate
like the ardent tongue of a virgin or a whore
a woman is rock & shale, carnelian fires
a man’s made of clay
easy to fashion to her sinister desires
a wicked Medusa, & I’m tangled in the strands
of her hair. her hands grip my throat
till I’m singing ‘baby, I don’t care.’
call her Lucretia, let me taste her bane kiss
that adheres. call her Hannah,
she can drown me in the slick vendetta of her tears
she’s a Rembrandt in the art of love
and sex too – sex is an art
paint me a weeping Pagliacci, darlin’
paint me a broken heart
she takes me for a crazy ride
then drops me off on the lonely roadside
baby blue, & all I can do
is blow her a kiss goodbye…
(Art: Andre de Dienes)
Published 17th Dec 2015
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17th Dec 2015 1:20am
she takes me for a crazy ride
then drops me off on the lonely roadside
baby blue, & all I can do
is blow her a kiss goodbye…
like that... like that a lot... saw baby blue, heard Dylan singing, it's all over now...
17th Dec 2015 1:48am
"a woman is rock & shale, carnelian fires
a man’s made of clay
easy to fashion to her sinister desires "
So damn true..
A woman's love can mold a man
Into any shape she wants-good or bad
"a wicked Medusa, & I’m tangled in the strands
of her hair. her hands grip my throat
till I’m singing ‘baby, I don’t care"
I'll confess
Some days I can relate to Medusa...
It's in my gender
I love this-
You truly have a beautiful mind, John
Thanks for sharing :)
a man’s made of clay
easy to fashion to her sinister desires "
So damn true..
A woman's love can mold a man
Into any shape she wants-good or bad
"a wicked Medusa, & I’m tangled in the strands
of her hair. her hands grip my throat
till I’m singing ‘baby, I don’t care"
I'll confess
Some days I can relate to Medusa...
It's in my gender
I love this-
You truly have a beautiful mind, John
Thanks for sharing :)
Anonymous
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17th Dec 2015 1:49am
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17th Dec 2015 3:32am
This write felt eritic to say the least.
And the way you pain this story
Is liquid! I thoroughly enjoy this.
A great topic s great ending
Just perfect
Johnny xoxoxo
Love Zazzles xoxoxox
And the way you pain this story
Is liquid! I thoroughly enjoy this.
A great topic s great ending
Just perfect
Johnny xoxoxo
Love Zazzles xoxoxox
17th Dec 2015 5:38am
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17th Dec 2015 6:40am
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17th Dec 2015 10:00am
oh lord, mister feddeler, that opening stanza was sublime. truly
your writing is fluid... faultless... simply addictive
loved this
xo
your writing is fluid... faultless... simply addictive
loved this
xo
17th Dec 2015 5:27pm
18th Dec 2015 00:36am
Such a smoooooth ink JohnFeddeler ... the first stanza grabs hold and you just have to finish the ride ... excellent !!
Anonymous
18th Dec 2015 9:14pm
Very cool subtle references in this piece John.
It almost has a lyrical feel to it, like song lyrics.
Pleasure to read such a well composed poem.
It almost has a lyrical feel to it, like song lyrics.
Pleasure to read such a well composed poem.
19th Dec 2015 8:22am
20th Dec 2015 1:00am
This line is supremely elegant and pleasing to my ear: "like a tempest incarcerated in a ball of glass". The poem as a whole is a pleasant free verse ramble through some lovely unique images and erotic sentiments. Thank you for the read.
25th Dec 2015 7:37am
I've returned to this one, this time perhaps I can form meaningful words. Though the ending leaves my thoughts severed. Your poetry is always powerfully writ. -blue angel
Anonymous
26th Dec 2015 2:45am
Wow John always enchanted with your writes......how you move thru emotions so smoothly is outstanding.......beautiful words you share with us as always.....xo :)
Anonymous
4th Jan 2016 6:39am
"a woman is rock & shale, carnelian fires
a man’s made of clay"
You dig beneath me darling, this is
some kind of beautiful. Cannot put my
finger on it but can taste of ..
Feddler Dear
a man’s made of clay"
You dig beneath me darling, this is
some kind of beautiful. Cannot put my
finger on it but can taste of ..
Feddler Dear
