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for your love
I will bring down the Gods
for you so they may weep
at your beauty, and sing of
your kindness and care for
all things I love you.
for you so they may weep
at your beauty, and sing of
your kindness and care for
all things I love you.
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Re. for your love
16th Dec 2015 10:44am
Wow such a profound profession of gratitude. Sounds like an amazing person you have in your life.
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Re. for your love
16th Dec 2015 2:08pm
Heartfelt profession. I'm beginning to think you're a sheep in a wolf's clothing.
I hate to seem so insensitive in light of the nature of such a tender verse; however, I would insert a semi-colon after 'things' to emphasize 'I love you'.
I started to suggest a period, but a period separates the stream of thought too abruptly, whereas a semi-colon keeps them together yet allows space
to own individually. A comma could work if you want the impression of a deep breath or slight pause prior to the statement.
I hate to seem so insensitive in light of the nature of such a tender verse; however, I would insert a semi-colon after 'things' to emphasize 'I love you'.
I started to suggest a period, but a period separates the stream of thought too abruptly, whereas a semi-colon keeps them together yet allows space
to own individually. A comma could work if you want the impression of a deep breath or slight pause prior to the statement.
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Re: Re. for your love
16th Dec 2015 2:48pm
thank you, it is the nature of a wolf to behave like a sheep as to not alarm the rest of the flock, you would be THAT sheep trying to warn the others
Re. for your love
This truly strummed the
chords of my heart, left
me without any sounds
for words nor syllables.
But everything do ricochet
inside of me...here:
"I will bring down the Gods
for you so they may weep "
Powerful might-(strength, capacity) ..for love..
-Howlings
chords of my heart, left
me without any sounds
for words nor syllables.
But everything do ricochet
inside of me...here:
"I will bring down the Gods
for you so they may weep "
Powerful might-(strength, capacity) ..for love..
-Howlings
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Re: Re. for your love
19th Dec 2015 4:11pm
is there trully any limit for one that desires to show love for another?
BBW
BBW
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Re: Re. for your love
19th Dec 2015 5:09pm
Re: Re. for your love
20th Dec 2015 2:19am
Re: Re. for your love
20th Dec 2015 2:35am
exactly one cannot claim to want to bring down the gods and then say "no it might be too tough, nevermind,how about a doughnut?"
Re: Re. for your love
20th Dec 2015 5:50am
Love that lol, you couldn't have said
it better.
Beautifully posed piece
it better.
Beautifully posed piece
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Re. for your love
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