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Prognosis 2
Daddy's little helper falters
The milligrams barely cut it
Damn near surrendering these days
Daddy's bone structure a collection of shards
His horses and men AWOL
No longer responsible for the debris
Surgeons gather in vulture formation
Their gaze registering insurance coverage
"Just one more incision," they enthuse,
"A few more turns of your screws
Stitch this ruin right back up
And all will be well."
The milligrams barely cut it
Damn near surrendering these days
Daddy's bone structure a collection of shards
His horses and men AWOL
No longer responsible for the debris
Surgeons gather in vulture formation
Their gaze registering insurance coverage
"Just one more incision," they enthuse,
"A few more turns of your screws
Stitch this ruin right back up
And all will be well."
Published 10th Nov 2015
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10th Nov 2015 8:13pm
a very Dark write Sir Crow..
love the ending..
""A few more turns of your screws
Stitch this ruin right back up
And all will be well."
wicked inking Sir..
love Crim
love the ending..
""A few more turns of your screws
Stitch this ruin right back up
And all will be well."
wicked inking Sir..
love Crim
11th Nov 2015 9:23pm
Dark indeed Crim! My docs are high priests of pain. Kind of pricey for that matter.
10th Nov 2015 8:27pm
The broken man is at their mercy. Bright lights showing the trauma of the price it'll take to stitch Daddy back together. Painful inking, blue angel
11th Nov 2015 9:27pm
It is kind of painful, but I'm working on it. I don't like being a source of profit to practitioners of dubious merit. I'd rather heal myself, but docs are a necessary evil I suppose. Thanks Blue Angel!
10th Nov 2015 8:51pm
"Daddy's little helper falters"
~feel every ounce of hurt in this, dear man ;( Even trying our best, they usually win on mg's/dosage..
..also soo guilty of hearing the Stones when reading..
loves the song & your piece flows right along with it smoothly.. a'purpose or not ;)
"Surgeons gather in vulture formation"
~damn, double damn & huggggssss.. surgeons are pure evil any way I see it..
most excellent dark lines T2.. you will always have high shelf on my altar.. hang in there!
luvins & sparkle
~d
~feel every ounce of hurt in this, dear man ;( Even trying our best, they usually win on mg's/dosage..
..also soo guilty of hearing the Stones when reading..
loves the song & your piece flows right along with it smoothly.. a'purpose or not ;)
"Surgeons gather in vulture formation"
~damn, double damn & huggggssss.. surgeons are pure evil any way I see it..
most excellent dark lines T2.. you will always have high shelf on my altar.. hang in there!
luvins & sparkle
~d
11th Nov 2015 9:31pm
I'm honored to be on your altar T! And I'm glad you caught the Stones reference. "What a drag it is getting old." I can feel every minute of it sometimes. Othertimes I simply can't act my age. Thanks T!
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11th Nov 2015 9:37pm
Hope I didn't do any damage with that punch! Still glad it had such a striking effect. I have to keep writing about doctors to a minimum despite their conspicuous presence in my life. It can be cathartic but it still pisses me off. They have way too much power over me. I'd give my spinal specialist a dose of his own surgery if I wasn't such a wimp. Thanks Taryn!
12th Nov 2015 1:31pm
Felt the ache of this deep dark dire ink......phenomenal pain penning crowfly!!
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"Damn near surrendering these days
Daddy's bone structure a collection of shards
His horses and men AWOL"
This instantly made me think of humpty dumpty,the sitting on a wall part..is like being on the fence...in the end torn and broken inevitably hope lingering in the shards..also made me think of a dear friend of my who suffers from PTSD among a long list of other injuries,he alwAys laugh and joke and smile calling himself Frankenstein and his doctors mad scientist but the smile never reaches his eyes..ahhh piercing hurt poignantly painted..Well Done Sir...I enjoyed this immensely!!!
Fav lines:
"Damn near surrendering these days
Daddy's bone structure a collection of shards
His horses and men AWOL"
This instantly made me think of humpty dumpty,the sitting on a wall part..is like being on the fence...in the end torn and broken inevitably hope lingering in the shards..also made me think of a dear friend of my who suffers from PTSD among a long list of other injuries,he alwAys laugh and joke and smile calling himself Frankenstein and his doctors mad scientist but the smile never reaches his eyes..ahhh piercing hurt poignantly painted..Well Done Sir...I enjoyed this immensely!!!
13th Nov 2015 8:40am
And so they say & I say ''yeah something
like that". lol
My interesting storyteller..
-Howlings
like that". lol
My interesting storyteller..
-Howlings
14th Nov 2015 5:28am
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15th Nov 2015 11:31pm
T hate this for you Darlin..bites it.. Wishing and smoochin onya back to feelin fine...
Big frown.
Great write though!
Love ya doll
Jennifer
Big frown.
Great write though!
Love ya doll
Jennifer
19th Nov 2015 2:46pm
makes my skin crawl, but i feel ya crowfly, all the way beneath my stitches
well wishes & hugs
xoxox
well wishes & hugs
xoxox
21st Nov 2015 9:50am
Whenever I get too caught up in my own life complaints I always remember your journey and how you manage to turn a better page from such agony, never letting shit cripple you. Pain changes our ways but you maintain the brainwaves, for all that flowers after, like the spirit power is all that matters. Thanks for being a proper example. The struggle you go through is not for nothing.
