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Do you know Me?
I am the wicked,
I am the good.
I worship, I pray
I work I play
I am called many names
I am wisdom, regret, pain,
love and hope
Evil does and doesn't
like my way
I am never here to stay
I will be here forever until
the end of days.
I am the good.
I worship, I pray
I work I play
I am called many names
I am wisdom, regret, pain,
love and hope
Evil does and doesn't
like my way
I am never here to stay
I will be here forever until
the end of days.
Published 16th Jun 2011
| Edited 8th Aug 2011
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31st Jul 2011 9:49pm
i do like what you have done here .maria.
it is good.
something about the title put me off.
Do you know us?
but the lines start with i, so i was thinking maybe you were trying to get something across,so i read it over again.
if it were mine i would put "we" in the place of the i's,i think it would read better.
anyhoo it was nice read.
fair play!
it is good.
something about the title put me off.
Do you know us?
but the lines start with i, so i was thinking maybe you were trying to get something across,so i read it over again.
if it were mine i would put "we" in the place of the i's,i think it would read better.
anyhoo it was nice read.
fair play!
1st Aug 2011 4:15am
Thanks. You're one of the few people actually giving me advice instead of just plain critique.
