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blue eyes arise
Your eyes are a starry night just before dawn
Sparkling to guide me to my lost destiny
The glow of the orb rising behind your mist covered peaks
Peeks over rolling hills down to the warm valley below
Unfurling arched wings to soar and absorb the awe-natural view
O'er fields of mown hay, in streams of gold mountain dew
To nourish a heart through two dew covered lips
Quenching this passionate thirst tween the curves of smooth hips
Till twin crescent moons set where a lone light tower shines
The glow of the moons light explodes when eclipses combine
The skyline reveals a pair of wolves howling under
Two dk silhouettes swiftly morph into one harmonious tune
A celestial cradle flickers between heavenly bodies Venus and Mars
As a chaotic aurora draped in pink linen exposes three morning stars
Daybreak erupts as dawn's light gave birth to their own shining Sun
Blue skies and blue eyes arise to see the cycle of life's never done
Sparkling to guide me to my lost destiny
The glow of the orb rising behind your mist covered peaks
Peeks over rolling hills down to the warm valley below
Unfurling arched wings to soar and absorb the awe-natural view
O'er fields of mown hay, in streams of gold mountain dew
To nourish a heart through two dew covered lips
Quenching this passionate thirst tween the curves of smooth hips
Till twin crescent moons set where a lone light tower shines
The glow of the moons light explodes when eclipses combine
The skyline reveals a pair of wolves howling under
Two dk silhouettes swiftly morph into one harmonious tune
A celestial cradle flickers between heavenly bodies Venus and Mars
As a chaotic aurora draped in pink linen exposes three morning stars
Daybreak erupts as dawn's light gave birth to their own shining Sun
Blue skies and blue eyes arise to see the cycle of life's never done
Published 29th Oct 2015
| Edited 24th Apr 2024
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29th Oct 2015 8:55pm
This is beautifully written erotica Poetryman. Fantastic imagery!
"Through fields of mown hay, in streams of gold mountain dew
To nourish a heart through two dew covered lips
Quenching this passionate thirst tween the curves of smooth hips
Till twin crescent moons set where a lone light tower shines"
This is both visionary and deeply sensual. That first line makes me think of the Van Gogh painting. Maybe you replaced the stars with your lover's eyes, a new masterpiece. Fine work!
"Through fields of mown hay, in streams of gold mountain dew
To nourish a heart through two dew covered lips
Quenching this passionate thirst tween the curves of smooth hips
Till twin crescent moons set where a lone light tower shines"
This is both visionary and deeply sensual. That first line makes me think of the Van Gogh painting. Maybe you replaced the stars with your lover's eyes, a new masterpiece. Fine work!
29th Oct 2015 9:10pm
Thank you for such an insightful comment crowfly! I was indeed thinking of Van Gogh's "Starry Night" as I started writing this. I got into a metaphorical frame of mine and wanted to write something sensual but not overtly sexual. It's my philosophy when writing erotica to not force the minds of readers into the gutter, but to be just naughty enough to allow them to go there if their imaginations desires that path. Then they can take it wherever thoughts meander...
JJ
JJ
Anonymous
29th Oct 2015 10:24pm
JJ. . .it has been my [writing] experience that "erotica" doesn't always have to be sexual or explicit for people to enjoy the idea of sex as sex can be every bit as sensual with the same satisfaction just as this piece is. . .As I've stated in the past, JJ, you always inspire me to be a better poet, to use choice words as well as interweave[ment]. . .I Heart You. . .xo, Devlin.
29th Oct 2015 11:12pm
Thank you Lyn. When I first got here about 4 years ago, I came here looking for a place to post and read erotic poems. At first I enjoyed all the in-out, dirty worded, 3 C-words sliding every which way and loose, squirting here and spraying there, blah blah blah... but then I got totally board with the same old descriptions of the same old sex acts followed by two sweaty bodies entwined in a sticky heap of flesh. It's like watching porn between two people getting paid to get into as many positions as they can in 3 minutes for masturbating men who need to get off before falling asleep alone every night. Umm, don't ask me how I know that...
Anyway, I like to fantasize that I am an artist with more to illustrate than an orgasm for one...
JJ
Anyway, I like to fantasize that I am an artist with more to illustrate than an orgasm for one...
JJ
29th Oct 2015 9:09pm
30th Oct 2015 2:55am
fantastic description and imagery, the passion behind the words is palpable, the back story steamy and hot. a nice semi erotic piece without a throbbing cock or wet cunt in sight - now thats what i call sexy :-)
excellent work my friend :-)
excellent work my friend :-)
30th Oct 2015 4:47am
That's what I'm talkin' 'bout!
Of course after a quick read I think it's too short. Ha, that's what she said. So I replied, "only God could make it longer." Too which she responded, "well, I know this doctor." so I said, "on your knees and say your prayers, and beg for my forgiveness..."
Of course after a quick read I think it's too short. Ha, that's what she said. So I replied, "only God could make it longer." Too which she responded, "well, I know this doctor." so I said, "on your knees and say your prayers, and beg for my forgiveness..."
I added 5 new lines, edited a few others and a photo... I made it longer, imagine that! Dr. J
31st Oct 2015 3:08am
1st Nov 2015 5:40pm
“A celestial cradle flickers between heavenly bodies Venus and Mars
As a chaotic aurora draped in pink linen exposes three morning stars”<--these lines wowed me!
I just love the imagery of this ink jj. So darn sensual, just like I like it! ;)
As a chaotic aurora draped in pink linen exposes three morning stars”<--these lines wowed me!
I just love the imagery of this ink jj. So darn sensual, just like I like it! ;)
1st Nov 2015 6:23pm
I am glad you like it like I like it 'cos hat's the way I write it!
Thank you Rain, you are a sun-shower on a hot summers day!
JJ
Thank you Rain, you are a sun-shower on a hot summers day!
JJ
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