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Your Eyes
I was drowning
In your depths,
not wanting to swim.
Wanting so much
.....to fall deeper
within.
Not one thought
of air.....
just drowning
there.
Not one thought of breath....
surrendering myself...
to blissful death.
In your depths,
not wanting to swim.
Wanting so much
.....to fall deeper
within.
Not one thought
of air.....
just drowning
there.
Not one thought of breath....
surrendering myself...
to blissful death.
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Re. Your Eyes
Anonymous
24th Oct 2015 3:01am
Eh . . . My thoughts of death doesn't involve drowning, I am usually walking in front of a semi . . .
Fast . . . Quick . . . Dead!
Fast . . . Quick . . . Dead!
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Re: Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 1:35pm
Can alway count on a you, to
give reason to smile during your
comments. I know that you know
what I meant. Thank you Jerry for
dropping a line.
Keith
give reason to smile during your
comments. I know that you know
what I meant. Thank you Jerry for
dropping a line.
Keith
Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 4:52am
Not bad I loved how you talked about it, but I think you should've been more descriptive on why their eyes are beautiful.
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Re: Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 1:42pm
Ms. Jackson, I appreciate the comment. It wasn't meant to descibe
her eyes, I was meant to describe
how I felt looking into them at that
moment. I know that there has been a pair that you just lost yourself in. Felt so warm and loved and in that moment you wanted to stay. You know how time just seems to stop.
As always I love and appreciate you.
Look forward to hear from you again.
Keith
her eyes, I was meant to describe
how I felt looking into them at that
moment. I know that there has been a pair that you just lost yourself in. Felt so warm and loved and in that moment you wanted to stay. You know how time just seems to stop.
As always I love and appreciate you.
Look forward to hear from you again.
Keith
Re: Re. Your Eyes
I understand and yes nothing beats looking into the eyes of the person you love.
Keep up the good work Keith :)
Keep up the good work Keith :)
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Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 4:53am
That's a lot to say about eyes huh? All in all its a beautiful piece!
💕Sissy
💕Sissy
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Re: Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 1:46pm
Hello Miss Sissy, as always great to
hear from you. I know that you must have experienced such a moment.
Was wondering, do you have such
mesmerizing eyes. 😄 as always
thank you for you comments.
Keith
hear from you. I know that you must have experienced such a moment.
Was wondering, do you have such
mesmerizing eyes. 😄 as always
thank you for you comments.
Keith
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Re: Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 1:57pm
Thank you Ms. Taryn, as always
I am truly appreciative of you taking the time to leave such kind words.
I am so glad that I was able to
give you reason think of such a pair.
Those are such special short moments
that stay with us. Thanks for the much
needed sent and received kiss. You are such a sweet and wonderful lady.
Keith
I am truly appreciative of you taking the time to leave such kind words.
I am so glad that I was able to
give you reason think of such a pair.
Those are such special short moments
that stay with us. Thanks for the much
needed sent and received kiss. You are such a sweet and wonderful lady.
Keith
Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 4:15pm
Keith I feel you deeply on this write so beautifully written..
having got lost in such eyes myself..
love this write from the heart and soul..
love Brenda
having got lost in such eyes myself..
love this write from the heart and soul..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 4:43pm
Brenda, you are so kind to me.
I am glad that you have had the same wonderful experience. I love when we are able to speak of such shared experiences. That is what I love about du and all it's wonderful members.
Love and thanks,
Keith
I am glad that you have had the same wonderful experience. I love when we are able to speak of such shared experiences. That is what I love about du and all it's wonderful members.
Love and thanks,
Keith
Re. Your Eyes
24th Oct 2015 6:02pm
the windows to the soul the only outwardly physical portal to the soul, eyes are magnificent and mystic... sweet, short and enjoyed...
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Re: Re. Your Eyes
25th Oct 2015 1:53am
Thank you for you always kind comments Dean. I appreciate
you taking the time to read.
Keith
you taking the time to read.
Keith
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25th Oct 2015 00:22am
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25th Oct 2015 8:39pm
Re. Your Eyes
27th Oct 2015 8:12pm
Sweet death. It has a romantic idea behind it. And to do it in the midst of the deep gaze...it can be blissful. But at some point we don't allow ourselves to go that far. And we snap out of it. And grumble for the reality we find ourselves enveloped. But yours does not go there. You stayed the course. That makes this piece a little more intense. I enjoyed this piece, K2M.
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Re: Re. Your Eyes
28th Oct 2015 3:43am
I really enjoy your comments immensely DPW. I am glad that
you agree that staying the course
added intensity. It is amazing to me what one can see in another's eyes.
Thanks so much for your thoughtful
comment sir.
Keith
you agree that staying the course
added intensity. It is amazing to me what one can see in another's eyes.
Thanks so much for your thoughtful
comment sir.
Keith