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Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
Where are the trees?
Where are the doves?
In this concrete room
There's nothing to love.
Stone walls and ceramic tiles
Surround me for miles and miles
I wonder if birds still sing
Or if bees still buzz
I ponder these things
In this room, just because
It's a moment of solace in my mind
Where beyond this single door
Is chaos and disorder
That I must return and do as before
And wipe my independence
Thoughts are flushed with a shirk
As I recompose my posture
And go back to work
Where are the doves?
In this concrete room
There's nothing to love.
Stone walls and ceramic tiles
Surround me for miles and miles
I wonder if birds still sing
Or if bees still buzz
I ponder these things
In this room, just because
It's a moment of solace in my mind
Where beyond this single door
Is chaos and disorder
That I must return and do as before
And wipe my independence
Thoughts are flushed with a shirk
As I recompose my posture
And go back to work
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Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
13th Oct 2015 7:22pm
sweet solace to be found in nature beautiful imagery and thoughts conveyed..
with love Crim
with love Crim
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Re: Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
13th Oct 2015 7:48pm
Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
13th Oct 2015 9:26pm
I really liked this... although the room is a bigger focus for me, the contrast... an empty, perhaps clinical treatment room which provides a bare-backdrop and a moment's stillness and contemplation, detached from the demands and constant motion of everyday life...wonder what's gone on in that room?
Lulu
Lulu
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Re: Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
13th Oct 2015 11:35pm
It would be hard to put in explicit detail the goings on. But no doubt the room gives off a meditative vibe. I am glad this caught your attention to respond. Thank you.
Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
13th Oct 2015 10:07pm
Very Poe-ish poem. Also, an existential rumination that I can relate to. Only sometimes those walls are firmly in your head and going back to work doesn't remove anything at all.
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13th Oct 2015 11:37pm
VP. I am humbled you saw Poe in this. Definitely the existential rumination is in tact. Sadly, work exacerbates many issues rather than solves. But s necessary evil? Thank you for your visit. You are always welcome.
Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
14th Oct 2015 00:12am
I take this as momentary refuge in the men's room. It's a bleak atmosphere, but probably preferable to the "chaos and disorder" waiting in your workplace and beyond. At least you still have your independence after a good wipe. Shows spirit, DPW! Excellent work. Just have to read the writing on the wall....
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Re: Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
14th Oct 2015 1:45am
In my mind, there are lots of things written on the wall that I end up reading. Not sure why sometimes. Haha Thanks for the read and comment.
Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
15th Oct 2015 3:26am
Isolation brings us so much closer to our true selves. It's a common retreat for me, yet still has such an impacting shift when my eyes open to flat gray everywhere. It's always a surprise to me though, how being in a barren place instantly brings to the heart a longing for the wilds, the grasses and insects and textures.
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Re. Your Thoughts Are Not Needed Here, Thank You
17th Oct 2015 9:03pm
dark giggles at your title, major darlins at work.. then applause to serious bang at open,
of doves and trees or peace and Earth.. heady combo most definitely..
"Stone walls and ceramic tiles
Surround me for miles and miles"
~to the four walls[of any kind].. relatable extremely..
make use of desks & daydreamin while workin'.. I'd imagine ;) and avoid the inner/outter chaos o'course..
enjoyed your rhyme of ponders misters. smiles to your day,
~d
of doves and trees or peace and Earth.. heady combo most definitely..
"Stone walls and ceramic tiles
Surround me for miles and miles"
~to the four walls[of any kind].. relatable extremely..
make use of desks & daydreamin while workin'.. I'd imagine ;) and avoid the inner/outter chaos o'course..
enjoyed your rhyme of ponders misters. smiles to your day,
~d
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21st Oct 2015 2:22pm