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Waterproof
I was baptized.
It didn't work.
Whatever they poured
over my innocent head,
I must have slept through.
That water moved right over me -
it met my skin,
came off in beads;
it met my skin
at infancy
and infancy declined.
The water didn't stain my sleep.
It must have been a pleasant dream -
so nice, the dress they put on me;
it must have missed my mind.
A quiet breath in water wades;
the substance in my skin will race
and rub the walls of every vein -
addict me to the truth -
for even as a little babe,
the guise of god left not a trace;
they blessed me, but it missed my face -
I'm holy waterproof.
~
Age when written: 16
It didn't work.
Whatever they poured
over my innocent head,
I must have slept through.
That water moved right over me -
it met my skin,
came off in beads;
it met my skin
at infancy
and infancy declined.
The water didn't stain my sleep.
It must have been a pleasant dream -
so nice, the dress they put on me;
it must have missed my mind.
A quiet breath in water wades;
the substance in my skin will race
and rub the walls of every vein -
addict me to the truth -
for even as a little babe,
the guise of god left not a trace;
they blessed me, but it missed my face -
I'm holy waterproof.
~
Age when written: 16
Published 16th Sep 2015
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Ok now that is a pick me up. X) it's got a erratic bubbly cadence to it. ridiculously fun and incredibly sacrilegious. X)
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18th Sep 2015 6:19am
"I'm holy waterproof" - could be read more than one way (either proof against holy water or misspelt WHOLLY waterproof).
How often one hears it said at times of evangelism "Why become a Christian? I was done as a baby".
How often one hears it said at times of evangelism "Why become a Christian? I was done as a baby".
18th Sep 2015 12:54pm
It was more like... "How are you an atheist if you were baptized?" Holy waterproof.
22nd Sep 2015 10:39pm
23rd Sep 2015 3:19am
I don't want to get into an argument or debate, but the thought of true atheism is heartbreaking to me. I'm not the type of Christian to hate on people for not being Christian. I'm pretty sure that EVERYONE has got it wrong somewhere. Religion is a machination created by man to try to understand God's plan. But to not believe in any sort of Higher Power doesn't seem like freedom to me, it seems hopeless, pointless and rather depressing. Life is depressing enough as it is. But, personally, I am grateful to have faith that I was created for a reason, that I am loved by someone greater than anything else, unconditionally...even if I don't fully understand it and have my doubts and questions.
24th Sep 2015 3:49am
I don't want to get into an argument, either, but I'd just like to leave one response here. If you wish to continue, we could PM.
Religion is a machination created by man, yes. I disagree with you that it was made to understand the divine; I believe we invented the concept of the divine itself for comfort. It is man's inner desires - to be loved, wanted, protected, special, even saved from death - that make it so successful. The idea of a protector and creator is appealing, but that doesn't make it true. I don't claim to know what happens after death or how things began, but not knowing seems far more logical than accepting without question what I was told - god made you in his image, you go to heaven when you die, etc - with no evidence. I believe it makes sense that we should want to know what's true, even if we need to put aside deeply held beliefs or desires to find it.
To me, being able to face that truth (what I consider truth - I'm trying hard not to be dogmatic) that there is no reassurance or "safety-net" of a higher power is the most freeing ability. My life is mine to change with my actions, not because I was "granted" free will but simply because I alone, existing in this brain in control of this body, have the responsibility to make it the way I want it. My own morals, not a god's or a tradition's; my own choices, not a god's mercy or miracle: these dictate my future. The concept may seem frightening at first, but not all truths are comforting. To finally accept that truth... it is freedom; it is bliss. At least, to me.
I grew up Catholic. Much of the stress in my life dissipated after I became an atheist. Almost all of it, actually. I've never been happier or felt freer than I have in the past 2 years. Different world views work for different people. I'm not trying to "win you over" or anything - sorry if it comes off that way, I'm pretty passionate about this type of thing - I just want to convey to you my mindset in the clearest way possible.
Religion is a machination created by man, yes. I disagree with you that it was made to understand the divine; I believe we invented the concept of the divine itself for comfort. It is man's inner desires - to be loved, wanted, protected, special, even saved from death - that make it so successful. The idea of a protector and creator is appealing, but that doesn't make it true. I don't claim to know what happens after death or how things began, but not knowing seems far more logical than accepting without question what I was told - god made you in his image, you go to heaven when you die, etc - with no evidence. I believe it makes sense that we should want to know what's true, even if we need to put aside deeply held beliefs or desires to find it.
To me, being able to face that truth (what I consider truth - I'm trying hard not to be dogmatic) that there is no reassurance or "safety-net" of a higher power is the most freeing ability. My life is mine to change with my actions, not because I was "granted" free will but simply because I alone, existing in this brain in control of this body, have the responsibility to make it the way I want it. My own morals, not a god's or a tradition's; my own choices, not a god's mercy or miracle: these dictate my future. The concept may seem frightening at first, but not all truths are comforting. To finally accept that truth... it is freedom; it is bliss. At least, to me.
I grew up Catholic. Much of the stress in my life dissipated after I became an atheist. Almost all of it, actually. I've never been happier or felt freer than I have in the past 2 years. Different world views work for different people. I'm not trying to "win you over" or anything - sorry if it comes off that way, I'm pretty passionate about this type of thing - I just want to convey to you my mindset in the clearest way possible.
24th Sep 2015 4:25am
Ah the beauty of reasonable discussion between different viewpoints without any degeneration into screaming and name calling... such a rare and beautiful sight.
