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Time, Trees and Trapdoors
Shuffling through life like a lobotomized zombie
disconnected, jumping from one tree to the next
the tree of life holding the hands of time
the tree of death to which my soul is bound
licking the flames of my own destruction
slipping in and out of the abyss
the depths of it's blackness drinking from my core
I jump through the trapdoor of delirium
where it doesn't matter if i'm a whole soul
my time slowly ticking away
I've traded heroin for drinking
there seems to be a void in me I can't fill
the light out of this nightmare
shines for me but I evade it's warmth
taking shelter in the cold
I wonder if there will be a trapdoor in hell
(note an old write)
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Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
31st Aug 2015 9:16pm
Fascinating imagery. "the tree of life holding the hands of time" - love that line! Powerful ink, Crim. Respectfully, blue angel
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1st Sep 2015 3:11pm
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Re: Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 3:12pm
thank you beautiful one for the advise and encouraging comments :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
31st Aug 2015 10:14pm
if not a trapdoor, at the very least a crack in the wall & eternally warm coffee...
"the tree of life holding the hands of time
the tree of death to which my soul is bound"
... profound, poignant, beautifully written, lovely lady
xoxox
"the tree of life holding the hands of time
the tree of death to which my soul is bound"
... profound, poignant, beautifully written, lovely lady
xoxox
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Re: Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 3:13pm
love your style beautiful Katja made me smile with your comments and humor thank you :)
with love Brenda
with love Brenda
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
31st Aug 2015 11:35pm
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1st Sep 2015 3:15pm
very true Paul thankfully I see my way out :)
thank you for visiting my pages and leaving your thoughts
with love and respect Crim
thank you for visiting my pages and leaving your thoughts
with love and respect Crim
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
31st Aug 2015 11:52pm
WoW. This woman sounds like she is on the edge of insanity. Holding on to the thin limb of a tree while fantasizing about death. As if she feels she belongs in or to Hell. Brave!
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Re: Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 3:17pm
I was on the edge of insanity when I wrote this..
thankfully I'm not so close to the edge anymore..
thank you Shauna for your great insight and comments :)
with love Brenda
thankfully I'm not so close to the edge anymore..
thank you Shauna for your great insight and comments :)
with love Brenda
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 00:42am
Excellent ink, dear Crim. Very nostalgic feel to it, even before I got to the note.
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Re: Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 3:18pm
thank you Sir Hades for picking up on that and for visiting me :)
with love Crim
with love Crim
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 1:52am
Baby grrrrrl, break my heart for you to be in such hell.
I love your soul, and feel it swell
Wish you felt it like i do as well.
Obviously yours burns and rages!
So much so, you have leigion marchin acrossed pages!?
I guess we women feel our souls in stages.
🌹A beautiful sad perfection of an ink. My white hot darlin sugarbitch, makes Jen loves you even more.
Wishin for that trapdoor in hell? I think you have already found it. 🐦
I love your soul, and feel it swell
Wish you felt it like i do as well.
Obviously yours burns and rages!
So much so, you have leigion marchin acrossed pages!?
I guess we women feel our souls in stages.
🌹A beautiful sad perfection of an ink. My white hot darlin sugarbitch, makes Jen loves you even more.
Wishin for that trapdoor in hell? I think you have already found it. 🐦
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Re: Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 3:23pm
thank you lovely Jennifer for the heart touching poetic comment :)
with love Brenda
with love Brenda
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 4:24am
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1st Sep 2015 3:23pm
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 5:48am
'Tween here ~~> "the tree of life holding the hands of time" ...
and here ~~> "the tree of death to which my soul is bound" ..
~hard hitting comparison with a dark peal of sameness.
*feel this, mind & heart these days.. hug-fukin-hug.
"there seems to be a void in me I can't fill ".. your innards exposed in this make
me see the strength in your insightful bond to self. never stop assessing, m'lovely..
Saw the note but still send a *fuckton* of dark luvins towards that void-* [no expiration/ use as needed!]
everly adoring your pen & hope there is a back door if there be a trapdoor in hell. *sharp write!
maul & luvstuff
~d
and here ~~> "the tree of death to which my soul is bound" ..
~hard hitting comparison with a dark peal of sameness.
*feel this, mind & heart these days.. hug-fukin-hug.
"there seems to be a void in me I can't fill ".. your innards exposed in this make
me see the strength in your insightful bond to self. never stop assessing, m'lovely..
Saw the note but still send a *fuckton* of dark luvins towards that void-* [no expiration/ use as needed!]
everly adoring your pen & hope there is a back door if there be a trapdoor in hell. *sharp write!
maul & luvstuff
~d
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Re: Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 3:25pm
lovely d~ thank you for embracing me and this write hugs back beautiful :)
with love Crim
with love Crim
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
1st Sep 2015 6:06pm
A beautiful written poem love the flow of it. I don't believe in hell so I don't think you will be there thanks for the write
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1st Sep 2015 6:09pm
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
2nd Sep 2015 1:49pm
Amazing Lady Crim....
The Structure and visual imagery here is breathtaking....
There is always a way out... with a Beautiful soul like yours....
You have the Keys to the Kingdom.....
no trap doors needed....
XOXO
Kandi
The Structure and visual imagery here is breathtaking....
There is always a way out... with a Beautiful soul like yours....
You have the Keys to the Kingdom.....
no trap doors needed....
XOXO
Kandi
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2nd Sep 2015 6:19pm
Re. Time, Trees and Trapdoors
3rd Sep 2015 1:16am
fascinating piece set in a bleak wasteland, Crim. we're all looking for an escape hatch...
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3rd Sep 2015 3:37pm