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I love this heavy write. Great imagery and deep hitting progression through the evolution of two lovers. Beautiful first stanza! I especially love the phrase "sweeping secrets on promiscuous lips". Just perfect. Thank you for sharing this.

Thank you Sammy, certain emotions hits heavy, no matter how one spells it.

lovely Rina a most beautiful, masterfully written poignant write..

it's painful when love dies..

powerful inking with love Brenda

You know it Brenda...yeah, nothing is ever beautiful in the aftermath. btw, i'm so digging your new profile pic :)

I appreciate the slow beat as the poem sinks deeper into the sadness of it all

It's interesting how the sadness creeps in slowly with time, seeps in every fiber of the body.
I'm glad it translated well within the words, Thank you Mr. Kexby

Whoa... Intense! Push come to shove, it doen't matter what the ingredients are... If the chemistry's right, it's all good.

Nah even chemistry doesn't help if each defines love differently.
Thanks for liking the intensity Neo128.

Vee, I read this piece as a poignant illustration of the alpha & omega of a loving, or ostensibly loving, relationship. Perhaps lovers who had the illusion of a life together with a sure foundation only to find it built on ethereal things. My favorite passage is: "one is white and the other dark   too bright to compare in blindness." To me this describes perfectly how lovers can be blinded by the brilliance of obsession or infatuation-based love maybe attracted by appearance, mind-blowing sex, or any number of fleeting pleasures while remaining comfortably oblivious to the realities of their relationship. I guess what I'm trying to say is Bravisima Vee!

There are always two sides to every story and just because one is louder doesn't mean it's correct.  Only the two know the real truth.
All i know is that, love in intensity..kills with intensity.

Thanks GW, for your ever in depth look into my work, makes me glad i penned something worthy :)

What an awesome line "love in intensity..kills with intensity. " I so agree with the idea of whoever is loudest...the squeaky wheel reality

Dark, intense piece of ink...
You are most def. A Poet, but a great storyteller as well!

I was thinking about that actually, and i'm humbled you think so PIKM, story telling is not easy given the fact how our attention span is so short nowadays when we read something.  I'm quite honored with your compliment, thank you!

amorous gamblers, w/a dowry of tears & heartbreak. Mozart's 'Requiem' replays in head...

I was listening to it when i wrote this, glad it caught your attention..:)
Thank you John, It's always good to see your comments on my page.

It took a bit for my slow brain to soak this up.
Crafted indeed, you definitely thought about how you would say it.
Poetic speak and design.
But you gave thought to rhythm, yet keeping enough plain speak- so it rolls out beautifully - the way poetry should.
when one weaves words and plays in a garden.....sometimes it can come off pretentious, or totally cryptic - this does not.
That's no mean feat- Artisan!!!

I'm going to print this praise and frame it :))  so that one of these days when my rhythm is out of sync i will come back and know where to pick it up again.

To be honest, i find certain writes that come from emotional depths write themselves. This is one that didn't get any edits (and as we talked about it the other day, my max rule is 3 edits, otherwise i lose the essence )

Thank you Soul for your wonderful feedback and for appreciating my humble scribble finding a home in your RL.

All we can ever do is agree to be Love's accomplice; it's the only chance for happiness.

I think the path heads straight forward (most often with optimism) but still a chance without a clear outcome. You summed it well Ahavati, thank you.

Beautiful, Rina.. simply brilliant as always.. you always write with such elegance, and passion.. into the list it goes.. much love, and respect..



Dave