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An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
Let me start by swearin my attraction to an occasional dusty ol juke joint was no cliche preachers daughter rebellion.
A good American girl, loved my Daddy, Jesus, and both their good names.
But the appeal and anononimoty of the sin and frolic rockin 'n rollin out those doors! Too much.
Was just the temptation to do me in.
At least i had respect enough to scratch that itch three counties away.
I had needs to be met.
And damned those needs.
Damn the need for the whine and moan from the likes of Hank Williams and Patsty Cline.
Double damned the need for the warm thrill and taste of gin.
And triple damned the need for a spin with a good ol country boy gone ornery!
Pardon, a necessary preface to my hot and bothered at him walkin in the door of my good Daddy's store.
And now i go on to the gritty of the nitty..
It started a dull thing of a day, was doin payroll, startled by the chimes announcing someone comin in.
I recognised him immediately from my last carouse about.
A deep blush risin and sweatin the thought of my cover blown, i tried very hard not to stare.
But good God he was sexy, all blue jeans and swagger, he strode right up with a wicked shit eatin grin.
"Hey baby i remember that shakin!"
He says.
Prayin my resolve would cover the weak in my knees i answered, "I'm sure you dont!" fightin hard the smile curling up the sides of my mouth.
He laughs "Yeah, what time you want me to pick you up?"
"Are you kidding!? Not on your life." I heard myself sayin, unconvinced.
The white hot flash in his devastating blue eyes nearly melted my ice bitch.
Then he turned around laughin said "Alrighty hun, i can read the hours on the door."
The rest of the day went by in a haze of tryin to focus vs. the tickle between my legs every time i thought of him.
Finally it turned time to close, hatin how scared i was at the thought of him not bein outside in that parking lot.
But of course there he was. Lookin so cool 'n tough. Leanin up against his rusty red pick-up truck.
Said "cool baby, hop on in."
Wasn't much talkin on the long bumpy ride to his place. Dirt roads can seem endless.
That one sure as hell did.
There was certainly no ceremony upon arrival, just a "Baby hop on out."
He was off, no help with my door.
Greeted by the blackest dog you ever saw, sniffin at my crotch and nippin at my skirt. Guess like dog like owner. I was seriously doubting my judgement at this point.
The insides of his trailer left no stereotype untouched, of your corn fed Ozark's man.
Prise fish mounted on the wall, Budweiser cans as far as the eyes could see, and a guitar laid out on the couch.
Thinkin to myself, good thing this was just a fuck. I mean, this dude would play a precious Montegue to my Capulet.
Opening the door to his bedroom he pointed me the way, says "Get ready sugar, gonna make you squeal!"
And after things got goin, it wasn't too long, until like a stuck pig, squeal i did!
You can't imagine the sounds comin outta that room. Like thunder scared livestock, huffin and pantin and snortin. Fuck! There may have been a whinney! He did ride me like Seabuiscuit. I mean rode hard and most definitely put away soakin wet.
Then suddenly he shouts "Glory!" and it was over as fast as it had started.. He grinned at me and rolled over. I lay there stunned and spent.
I sat up on the edge of the bed. Not sure what to think. Then noticed my name on the top of a piece of paper on the nightstand. I picked it up and immediately read.
It was the fumbly beginnings of an actually quite poetic love song.
Quadruple damned the pounding in my now softening heart.
I lay back down, spooned up behind him, and kissed the back of his curly dark head.
A good American girl, loved my Daddy, Jesus, and both their good names.
But the appeal and anononimoty of the sin and frolic rockin 'n rollin out those doors! Too much.
Was just the temptation to do me in.
At least i had respect enough to scratch that itch three counties away.
I had needs to be met.
And damned those needs.
Damn the need for the whine and moan from the likes of Hank Williams and Patsty Cline.
Double damned the need for the warm thrill and taste of gin.
And triple damned the need for a spin with a good ol country boy gone ornery!
Pardon, a necessary preface to my hot and bothered at him walkin in the door of my good Daddy's store.
And now i go on to the gritty of the nitty..
It started a dull thing of a day, was doin payroll, startled by the chimes announcing someone comin in.
I recognised him immediately from my last carouse about.
A deep blush risin and sweatin the thought of my cover blown, i tried very hard not to stare.
But good God he was sexy, all blue jeans and swagger, he strode right up with a wicked shit eatin grin.
"Hey baby i remember that shakin!"
He says.
Prayin my resolve would cover the weak in my knees i answered, "I'm sure you dont!" fightin hard the smile curling up the sides of my mouth.
He laughs "Yeah, what time you want me to pick you up?"
"Are you kidding!? Not on your life." I heard myself sayin, unconvinced.
The white hot flash in his devastating blue eyes nearly melted my ice bitch.
Then he turned around laughin said "Alrighty hun, i can read the hours on the door."
The rest of the day went by in a haze of tryin to focus vs. the tickle between my legs every time i thought of him.
Finally it turned time to close, hatin how scared i was at the thought of him not bein outside in that parking lot.
But of course there he was. Lookin so cool 'n tough. Leanin up against his rusty red pick-up truck.
Said "cool baby, hop on in."
Wasn't much talkin on the long bumpy ride to his place. Dirt roads can seem endless.
That one sure as hell did.
There was certainly no ceremony upon arrival, just a "Baby hop on out."
He was off, no help with my door.
Greeted by the blackest dog you ever saw, sniffin at my crotch and nippin at my skirt. Guess like dog like owner. I was seriously doubting my judgement at this point.
The insides of his trailer left no stereotype untouched, of your corn fed Ozark's man.
Prise fish mounted on the wall, Budweiser cans as far as the eyes could see, and a guitar laid out on the couch.
Thinkin to myself, good thing this was just a fuck. I mean, this dude would play a precious Montegue to my Capulet.
Opening the door to his bedroom he pointed me the way, says "Get ready sugar, gonna make you squeal!"
And after things got goin, it wasn't too long, until like a stuck pig, squeal i did!
You can't imagine the sounds comin outta that room. Like thunder scared livestock, huffin and pantin and snortin. Fuck! There may have been a whinney! He did ride me like Seabuiscuit. I mean rode hard and most definitely put away soakin wet.
Then suddenly he shouts "Glory!" and it was over as fast as it had started.. He grinned at me and rolled over. I lay there stunned and spent.
I sat up on the edge of the bed. Not sure what to think. Then noticed my name on the top of a piece of paper on the nightstand. I picked it up and immediately read.
It was the fumbly beginnings of an actually quite poetic love song.
Quadruple damned the pounding in my now softening heart.
I lay back down, spooned up behind him, and kissed the back of his curly dark head.
Written by
calamitygin
(Jennifer Michael McCurry)
Published 24th Aug 2015
| Edited 24th Sep 2015
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Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
24th Aug 2015 3:41pm
lovely Jennifer being a transplanted country girl myself this story of lust put a big smile on my face this morning :)
such vivid and delightful detail..
with a very endearing ending..
love this ink..
with love Brenda
such vivid and delightful detail..
with a very endearing ending..
love this ink..
with love Brenda
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24th Aug 2015 3:43pm
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
24th Aug 2015 6:03pm
Love this, Jennifer! It begins like a raw return to Tobacco Road, then ends with the romance of his partially written poem. Your description of the setting is hilarious, just the ticket from a hillbilly girl. Your style is wild but never spins out of control. Well done!
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24th Aug 2015 6:14pm
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24th Aug 2015 6:20pm
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24th Aug 2015 6:29pm
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
24th Aug 2015 6:38pm
Sounds like a Marlboro commercial! Gotta love us county bumpkins! Great read! 💕Sissy
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24th Aug 2015 6:46pm
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
24th Aug 2015 6:47pm
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24th Aug 2015 7:03pm
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
24th Aug 2015 7:24pm
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
24th Aug 2015 8:09pm
Brings to mind several songs steeped in Americana sentiment, like John Mellencamp's "Pink Houses" or Tom Petty's "Free Fallin"
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I referenced Tom pettey in the first paragraph. Pink houses, interesting. Dig the hell outta both you mentioned. Your life must be filled with music JM. You are always comparing works to it. Thats cool. I like it, mine is filled with it too. Thanks sweetie for your comment and reading.
💫J
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
24th Aug 2015 9:41pm
This screams out "This is the real me". Filled with the fear of a vengeful God and the need for love that is the human condition. It's quite a lofty goal you set for yourself and easily overcame. Let your bumpkin shine on Jennifer I loved it.
J
J
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24th Aug 2015 9:48pm
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
25th Aug 2015 00:15am
This poem is fun J. You gave this girl bones and flesh, and the atmosphere is perfect.
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25th Aug 2015 00:28am
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
25th Aug 2015 1:09am
Some of my favorite Nawth Kakalakee (NC) appear just like this. Enjoyed this tremendously. Love you southern flava' : )
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25th Aug 2015 1:14am
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
Love the emotional tug this one gave me at the end. The human side so often discarded in situations like this, opened upon fully with a decision to stay after reading, proving what really is *important here. Adorable tale, Jen. Very much enjoyed.
Michael
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25th Aug 2015 1:46am
Thank you Michael, lol but this is Jennifer MICHAEL Mccurry. We share a name, next time you remember. Lol
Seriously though, sentiment appreciated and agreed apon.
💫J
Seriously though, sentiment appreciated and agreed apon.
💫J
Re: Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
25th Aug 2015 2:03am
OMG...so embarrassed Jen. Working a ton of hours and was just scrolling through my updates very tiredlike and reading. Apologies. Truly was a wonderful read, lol... and I definitely won't make that mistake twice. :)
Micbael
Micbael
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25th Aug 2015 2:08am
Please dont be embarrased lol in a long line of great women to be confused with, Savaja would rank very high on that list.
Sincerely
🚬💋J
Sincerely
🚬💋J
Re: Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
25th Aug 2015 2:45am
Lol Michael you turd, changed that on me, now my comments look like the ramblings of an insane woman, and i thought it was funny.
💋J
💋J
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
25th Aug 2015 2:26am
It really feels -- at least the first part -- like the lyrics to a song? Fun, running narrative with come chorus sort of circling back... Do you have any sound in mind (other than the obvious) to accompany this?
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25th Aug 2015 2:32am
Hadn't thought about it. As i said to someone earlier i vaugely referenced Tom Petty, a lot old country crooners circling my mind. Willie Nelson, i guess americana classics.
Very interesting thought........🌏
🔧🔧Thinkin
J
Very interesting thought........🌏
🔧🔧Thinkin
J
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
Anonymous
25th Aug 2015 2:05pm
Some folk call them Trailer Trash
Others call them hicks
But after drinkin fresh corn mash
They're lovin horny chicks
Others call them hicks
But after drinkin fresh corn mash
They're lovin horny chicks
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25th Aug 2015 2:34pm
Ha! Dont call me trash till youve slept in my trailor sugar...
Thats great, loved it. Laughed big out loud.
💋Jen
Thats great, loved it. Laughed big out loud.
💋Jen
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
25th Aug 2015 4:11pm
"A good American girl, loved my Daddy, Jesus, and both their good names.
But the appeal and anononimoty of the sin and frolic rockin 'n rollin out those doors! Too much. "
~Gotta start by saying.. this entire 1st stanza could be turned into the next #1 on song billboards! *Hillbilly Lust* !!
The conflict & soul of character was captured right off w/these lines. lovely job!
"And triple damned the need for a spin with a good ol country boy gone ornery!"
~tippin' a cuervo shot to you here sweeties, I grew up [small town]country then to cali & can sooo relate!
~~>you've reminded me of the hawt country boys who *knew how to move dem jeans..;) *swoon
""Hey baby i remember that shakin!"
~Killin me wif your commentary lady! omfg.. all through this prosey piece.
You have shared a gem of a great time here-- the "just enuf" back story, emotion, humor, & Damn fine soft ending.
really felt this one.
Now--...gimme sexy bows, I say to you. [A well deserved one] fer ticklin my fancies this morn!
loves you Jen of pen..*mwah
~d
But the appeal and anononimoty of the sin and frolic rockin 'n rollin out those doors! Too much. "
~Gotta start by saying.. this entire 1st stanza could be turned into the next #1 on song billboards! *Hillbilly Lust* !!
The conflict & soul of character was captured right off w/these lines. lovely job!
"And triple damned the need for a spin with a good ol country boy gone ornery!"
~tippin' a cuervo shot to you here sweeties, I grew up [small town]country then to cali & can sooo relate!
~~>you've reminded me of the hawt country boys who *knew how to move dem jeans..;) *swoon
""Hey baby i remember that shakin!"
~Killin me wif your commentary lady! omfg.. all through this prosey piece.
You have shared a gem of a great time here-- the "just enuf" back story, emotion, humor, & Damn fine soft ending.
really felt this one.
Now--...gimme sexy bows, I say to you. [A well deserved one] fer ticklin my fancies this morn!
loves you Jen of pen..*mwah
~d
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25th Aug 2015 5:19pm
Omfg's back D. Thanks sooo much. Thrilled by your words. As always, but even more. I really liked this piece, am a good hillbilly grrrl, and wanted it sharp. We are colorful, but not stupid. The word hillbilly goes way back to some, though uneducated, smart, hard fucking working people who did a lot to survive with little. I wanted to give a taste, but represent.
Thanks and love always.
💛J
Thanks and love always.
💛J
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
25th Aug 2015 10:03pm
Well dag Diggity dog!! That was a might powerful pounding u must've gotten hit wit ma'am! lol...excellent spill... :) lol
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26th Aug 2015 00:00am
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
25th Aug 2015 11:05pm
I think I just fell into a Russ Meyer film. Lots of big tits and hootin' and hollerin' while going' down south the Dixie Line for that sweet Georgia peach pie.
But seriously, this was well done and fun to read. I read it complete with the accent and all. Great work Calam!
But seriously, this was well done and fun to read. I read it complete with the accent and all. Great work Calam!
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26th Aug 2015 00:03am
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26th Aug 2015 4:06am
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26th Aug 2015 4:35am
Lol Thanks John, my loyal friend. Alway flattered by your reading my stuff. Have so much respect for you doll.
Have a rockibilly barbie tatoo. Lol
💛J
Have a rockibilly barbie tatoo. Lol
💛J
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
26th Aug 2015 11:52am
You're an exciting woman, and with such a sweet ending. I love your Ozark charm in true fashion. Dare I say it feels like home :)
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26th Aug 2015 12:35pm
Dare you say it feels like home?
Love that. There is always some mystery in your poems you keep to yourself, in a lovely fashion. Now in your coments.
Very cool.
P thank you.
💫J
Love that. There is always some mystery in your poems you keep to yourself, in a lovely fashion. Now in your coments.
Very cool.
P thank you.
💫J
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
26th Aug 2015 1:38pm
you created a hottest gem Jenn... your words flow beautifully till the end... awesome ink :D
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26th Aug 2015 1:49pm
Thank you sweetly. MV always love your comments, thank you for reading!
💛J
💛J
Re. An almost unbelievable tale of Hillbilly lust
29th Sep 2015 3:04am
Jenn, you have the country, southern, dialect down just right. I felt this one down where the sun don't shine. This is just like I like stories, full of sass and a big tun on. I grew up in the culture you describe so richly. This reads authentically in every way. Prose doesn't get better than this. You've got me in the web of your sensuality. And I love being there. ;-)
John
John
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29th Sep 2015 3:09am
Thrills John, in my head and down to between mih thighs. I can' t stop grinnin.
Thank you so much. A serendipitous event meeting you....
Sweet dreams.
Reading the rest of your work tomorrow. Cant wait.
⭐Jennifer
Thank you so much. A serendipitous event meeting you....
Sweet dreams.
Reading the rest of your work tomorrow. Cant wait.
⭐Jennifer