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Selfishly Spun
Spider, why do you
sit lifeless on
my nicely decorated wall?
Is it not, my wall
to sit upon so still?
Spider, why do you crawl
all legs
upon my wall?
A wall so creamily smooth is surely for me
and me only, to sprawl upon?
You take from me,
and leave me nothing but
shabby, silken webs
stuck in dark corners I hope to avoid.
I wouldn't hurt a fly, how about you?
Spider?
Your silence is worse
than your bite.
You sit
you crawl
you sit
you
crawl
I give you everything, and you
give nothing in return.
By DB (06/07/2011)
sit lifeless on
my nicely decorated wall?
Is it not, my wall
to sit upon so still?
Spider, why do you crawl
all legs
upon my wall?
A wall so creamily smooth is surely for me
and me only, to sprawl upon?
You take from me,
and leave me nothing but
shabby, silken webs
stuck in dark corners I hope to avoid.
I wouldn't hurt a fly, how about you?
Spider?
Your silence is worse
than your bite.
You sit
you crawl
you sit
you
crawl
I give you everything, and you
give nothing in return.
By DB (06/07/2011)
Published 7th Jun 2011
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7th Jun 2011 4:08pm
i totally got the point. i love it, you take something so simple and everyday and make it somethng bigger. lov it
7th Jun 2011 4:11pm
Thank you. Kind words. Perhaps ironically and uninterestingly, I was inspired by an actual spider on my wall. Thanks Mr Spider!
8th Jun 2011 2:48am
i really admire your writing talents....your one of the few poets i can read without falling asleep.
8th Jun 2011 8:44am
I totally agree with the first comment. Such a simple everyday thing that you expounded on so well. It was quite emotional for talking about a spider which is brilliant. I loved it.
8th Jun 2011 1:35pm
9th Jun 2011 7:09pm
I love that you have a power for perspective that i like to think i share, and that you can exercise it so clearly. I would be mentally incapable of writing this poem without it turning into a social commentary.
9th Jun 2011 7:31pm
It is a social commentary of sorts, I just let the reader decide what is important to them. This poem is about people. Sometimes my poems are very simple and require little thought, sometimes I try to weave in more complex ideas but subtly. There are no right or wrong answers where poetry is concerned. :)
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
9th Jun 2011 8:23pm
i think i understand.
i try not to presume when it comes to poetry. ill take what lesson i want from a poem if it's there, but i try not to impose my insight on the author (there are a lot of weakminded people out there with pens and paper it would seem)
i try not to presume when it comes to poetry. ill take what lesson i want from a poem if it's there, but i try not to impose my insight on the author (there are a lot of weakminded people out there with pens and paper it would seem)
17th Jun 2011 9:25pm
I sit and crawl and sit and crawl.. Why dont you leave the spider alone? It's because it's not a bee right lol
