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Drop
I plummet.
Squares of maize below,
and forest green striping chocolate earth.
In heavy air I hang,
up and down suspended
briefly.
Slowly
descending
gathering pace,
terracotta meets terra firma
but I am not afraid,
brothers and sisters surround me.
We are free.
I impact.
Shards of aqua splinters
erupt in transparent fireworks.
This is no bloody massacre,
no tears shed.
Triumphant
with orchestral
synchronicity we reunite,
family flows away.
My work is done,
I pass on the gift...
By DB (06/01/2011)
For anandosen's "Rain Rain Come Again" contest
Squares of maize below,
and forest green striping chocolate earth.
In heavy air I hang,
up and down suspended
briefly.
Slowly
descending
gathering pace,
terracotta meets terra firma
but I am not afraid,
brothers and sisters surround me.
We are free.
I impact.
Shards of aqua splinters
erupt in transparent fireworks.
This is no bloody massacre,
no tears shed.
Triumphant
with orchestral
synchronicity we reunite,
family flows away.
My work is done,
I pass on the gift...
By DB (06/01/2011)
For anandosen's "Rain Rain Come Again" contest
Published 8th Jun 2011
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9th Jun 2011 7:07pm
is this an observation on the mind-altering effects of...many things...or a metaphorical observation of human bonds?
9th Jun 2011 7:39pm
Well, I don't usually like to spell out the meanings of my poems because I like people to take away their own meanings, but I can say that this has nothing to do with reacreational drug usage. It was my "entry" for another user's (Anandosen) "Rain Rain Come Again" contest on the forums.
I was just inspired to write it, it was very quick, took about 20 minutes give or take. I will say that I definitely had human element in mind when writing it.
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, I appreciate it.
I was just inspired to write it, it was very quick, took about 20 minutes give or take. I will say that I definitely had human element in mind when writing it.
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, I appreciate it.
9th Jun 2011 8:16pm
no problem. i read your bit about interpretation i believe, and i agree. but as someone who's been known to intentionally write misleading multiple metaphors and call them poetry, i couldnt be too sure.
17th Jun 2011 9:23pm
