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Remember never, When...
Do you remember
never, when...
Man 'became' amongst
the livin?
Lost, lookin' to find himself
givin' into lonely, he was given
a gift... 'Wo-mb-for-Man' by
the Father...
but he had to go further
farther than intended...
Can you remember never,
when...
joy exploded,
you were impulsed
to expend it...
like butterflies that
flutter 'bout the sky,
eyes display
wonder n' beauty
from all around can sprout...
Does one recall
never, when...
pain is all consumin...'
eatin' away
at the soul,
a vast emptiness,
a darkened hole...
too expansive
for a mind to contemplate,
far too erosive
to accommodate...
Remember never, when...
so many thoughts
n' emotions, opened
slowly like a closed fist?
I wonder,
can one remember
never, when...
they didn't EXIST...?
never, when...
Man 'became' amongst
the livin?
Lost, lookin' to find himself
givin' into lonely, he was given
a gift... 'Wo-mb-for-Man' by
the Father...
but he had to go further
farther than intended...
Can you remember never,
when...
joy exploded,
you were impulsed
to expend it...
like butterflies that
flutter 'bout the sky,
eyes display
wonder n' beauty
from all around can sprout...
Does one recall
never, when...
pain is all consumin...'
eatin' away
at the soul,
a vast emptiness,
a darkened hole...
too expansive
for a mind to contemplate,
far too erosive
to accommodate...
Remember never, when...
so many thoughts
n' emotions, opened
slowly like a closed fist?
I wonder,
can one remember
never, when...
they didn't EXIST...?
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Re. Remember never, When...
28th Jul 2015 2:49pm
For me, it just Never happened.
This is deep my friend, you had me twisting in different directions.
This is deep my friend, you had me twisting in different directions.
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
28th Jul 2015 11:53pm
Aaaawwww thank u my dear! Yea it was one of those pieces that woke me up to write. lol, appreciate u much :)
Re. Remember never, When...
28th Jul 2015 7:32pm
"Can you remember never,
when... "
~just gona say.. I am jealously adoring this line! great whimsy here, dear poet..
..as she grumble~pouts away..lol
"Remember never, when...
so many thoughts
n' emotions, opened
slowly like a closed fist? "
~oh, my fav! ..bleating beauty in the opening to emotion..
outstanding verses, m'friend! smiles to you ;)
~d
when... "
~just gona say.. I am jealously adoring this line! great whimsy here, dear poet..
..as she grumble~pouts away..lol
"Remember never, when...
so many thoughts
n' emotions, opened
slowly like a closed fist? "
~oh, my fav! ..bleating beauty in the opening to emotion..
outstanding verses, m'friend! smiles to you ;)
~d
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
28th Jul 2015 11:55pm
You lil sweet talker you! :) thank u my friend so much, truly appreciate your support always :)
Re. Remember never, When...
this is incredibly deep Poe....gotta sit back and reassess your words..after the first two stanzas I was already deep in thought ..and the last..."remember never when they didn't EXIST"...ok I'll try again in the morn when the spirit is fresh from its travels cuz the mind ain't gonna totally grasp this one without some help..great writing my dude
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
29th Jul 2015 4:08am
You honor n humble me once more bro. N I'm sincerely grateful for all your support always! Of course if it made u muse over it, maybe that means it will spark your pen n that would surely be a treat! :)
Re. Remember never, When...
29th Jul 2015 8:17am
Ahhh, Erotic Ninja, luv ~ :-*
The paths you cause my mind to contemplate, the inner and outer space I travel. You have me thinking of quantum mechanics and the ourobouros all at once together simultaneously, the World Tree and the Source of all Sources: all this a jumbled, throbbing mass inside my head ~ upon my soul.
I begin to lose the words to describe your incredibly evocative, provocative poetry, luv. :-*
The paths you cause my mind to contemplate, the inner and outer space I travel. You have me thinking of quantum mechanics and the ourobouros all at once together simultaneously, the World Tree and the Source of all Sources: all this a jumbled, throbbing mass inside my head ~ upon my soul.
I begin to lose the words to describe your incredibly evocative, provocative poetry, luv. :-*
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
29th Jul 2015 11:35am
Aawww my dear sweet Sav. YOU just swelled my head to an enormous size! NOT the lil one this time though! lol
Truly, n easily one of the very best comments I've EVER recieved, n I'm super flattered n ever grateful for all ur support! Mmmuuuaaahhh!!! thank u :)
Truly, n easily one of the very best comments I've EVER recieved, n I'm super flattered n ever grateful for all ur support! Mmmuuuaaahhh!!! thank u :)
Re. Remember never, When...
29th Jul 2015 5:54pm
poe, you've just gotta stop fucking my mind like this, yes [?]
"never, when"
^^^^^
... you coulda just written that & i'da been all over this
brilliant
xo
"never, when"
^^^^^
... you coulda just written that & i'da been all over this
brilliant
xo
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
29th Jul 2015 7:34pm
Lol aaaawww my baby, stop fucking
U!? In my wildest dreams it's all I'd wanna do!! lol but yea, u know I'm so overjoyed by your support always right? :)
U!? In my wildest dreams it's all I'd wanna do!! lol but yea, u know I'm so overjoyed by your support always right? :)
Re. Remember never, When...
30th Jul 2015 2:26pm
you definitely created a gem... every word kept me drawn in till the end... great to see your ink again my friend :)
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
30th Jul 2015 6:15pm
Thank you bro! so happy to hear from you n appreciate you thoughts n support. :)
Re. Remember never, When...
31st Jul 2015 5:09am
Oh I absolutely loved this..and the ending was indeed the icing on the cake.made me read it all over again..splendid scribe sir..that 3rd stanza is a lovely ..beautiful imagery!!!
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
1st Aug 2015 2:12am
Many Thanks my dear! Happy to know you still find my stuff decent enough to comment lol... Truly, appreciate you much :)
Re. Remember never, When...
Anonymous
1st Aug 2015 2:18am
Hey Poet......you write the most interesting thought provoking writes ever......this is brilliant......enjoyed very much.....xo :)
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
1st Aug 2015 2:53am
Re. Remember never, When...
Anonymous
4th Aug 2015 6:14am
oh wow PIKM, this is deep philosophy at its best.
I think our perception is so limited (faulty by design) that we can never process anything from all angles, eventually the mind shuts down or focuses attention elsewhere to just survive the harsh reality of things.
awesome ink!
I think our perception is so limited (faulty by design) that we can never process anything from all angles, eventually the mind shuts down or focuses attention elsewhere to just survive the harsh reality of things.
awesome ink!
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Re: Re. Remember never, When...
4th Aug 2015 2:31pm
Aaawww sweetness you humble me...
As I've said many times before, I'm a conduit, but I am grateful! :) truly n always I appreciate you n your support my dear :)
As I've said many times before, I'm a conduit, but I am grateful! :) truly n always I appreciate you n your support my dear :)