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For Her
To the greatest
girl in the world,
the sweetest,
the best kisser
and the warmest
cuddler,
the downright
sexiest woman
on the planet,
the closest friend
and most sympathetic
listener,
the most beautiful
person I have ever
had the pleasure
or the privilege
of laying eyes on...
I hope you're having
just a gosh-darn
wonderful
Valentine's Day
with him.
girl in the world,
the sweetest,
the best kisser
and the warmest
cuddler,
the downright
sexiest woman
on the planet,
the closest friend
and most sympathetic
listener,
the most beautiful
person I have ever
had the pleasure
or the privilege
of laying eyes on...
I hope you're having
just a gosh-darn
wonderful
Valentine's Day
with him.
Published 4th Jun 2011
| Edited 7th Jun 2011
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4th Jun 2011 5:19am
Anonymous
4th Jun 2011 5:44am
Better late than never I suppose! "laughs" this should be a hallmark card! I'd buy it!
4th Jun 2011 5:07pm
Ha, nice. Glad to see that if this whole career thing doesn't work out, I do at least have a secondary line of work in writing for Hallmark. Thanks for reading.
4th Jun 2011 4:21pm
original and only expected because it was you. i wouldn't have from anyone else. [; much enjoyed, mike. [:
4th Jun 2011 5:06pm
I didn't realize I was becoming predictable... I'll have to shake it up a bit I suppose! Haha, thanks for reading.
5th Jun 2011 11:17am
oh, no, not predictable. i just know you're not the mush-pot, cliche love poem type, so was expecting a twist somewhere. keep on. [:
4th Jun 2011 7:50pm
in my questionable opinion, that the poem would benefit from losing the last line and closing on 'with him'
7th Jun 2011 1:50am
I see your point. I was going for something to give it an extra kick at the end, but as a poem (and not just a rant) it sounds better without. Thanks man.
Anonymous
4th Jun 2011 9:12pm
I agree with ma main man Jamie over there.
it would provide a more shocking, abrupt end to this poem if you just ended on 'with him'. He sounds like a twat!
RT
it would provide a more shocking, abrupt end to this poem if you just ended on 'with him'. He sounds like a twat!
RT
22nd Jul 2011 1:02am
nice mike.
it is somewhat refreshing to come across an actual love poem.
shine on!
it is somewhat refreshing to come across an actual love poem.
shine on!
Anonymous
3rd Dec 2011 1:43am
Love's a bitch sometimes! Awesome poem! =)
28th Feb 2012 11:43pm
29th Feb 2012 2:44am
Well, this one was just written on a lark, not really intended to presume any literary value, but I'm glad you liked it!
19th Oct 2012 5:30pm
