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get my cell ready
He's in jail ...
So what the fuck am I supposed to do?
He's your cousin
I've got lots of cousins
besides it's my dad's birthday
Dad spent some of mine in jail
Some of his too
That dumbfuck cousin of mine
Looked on the net
Counts are
Possession of coke
Posession of meth
Driving without a license
Back child support
I keep some weed in my car
To take the edge off
Some Jack too
To take the edge off
Sometimes my .45
To take the edge off
along with some of my coworkers
But hey I work
Not like that dumbfuck
I cut open my knees not so long ago
300 lb heavy bag
The crimson pearls looked like pomegranate juice
They've healed to watermelon seeds
He and I use to like watermelon
In between stealing our grandmother's beer and cigarettes
He's still stealing from her again
Even from her grave
Dumbfuck
I'm pounding that bag again
Carving out the hickory sticks I'll need
to beat his ass
Bloody
Prepping for a fight
That won't come
Because I love that
Dumbfuck
I'll slip him a twenty
Get high with him
Bow on my mended knees
Waiting for the next call
Shifting through her lullabies
But wanting that .45
Because
I'm a dumbfuck too
So what the fuck am I supposed to do?
He's your cousin
I've got lots of cousins
besides it's my dad's birthday
Dad spent some of mine in jail
Some of his too
That dumbfuck cousin of mine
Looked on the net
Counts are
Possession of coke
Posession of meth
Driving without a license
Back child support
I keep some weed in my car
To take the edge off
Some Jack too
To take the edge off
Sometimes my .45
To take the edge off
along with some of my coworkers
But hey I work
Not like that dumbfuck
I cut open my knees not so long ago
300 lb heavy bag
The crimson pearls looked like pomegranate juice
They've healed to watermelon seeds
He and I use to like watermelon
In between stealing our grandmother's beer and cigarettes
He's still stealing from her again
Even from her grave
Dumbfuck
I'm pounding that bag again
Carving out the hickory sticks I'll need
to beat his ass
Bloody
Prepping for a fight
That won't come
Because I love that
Dumbfuck
I'll slip him a twenty
Get high with him
Bow on my mended knees
Waiting for the next call
Shifting through her lullabies
But wanting that .45
Because
I'm a dumbfuck too
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Re: get my cell ready
Fuck me at the imagery...
The crimson pearls looked like pomegranate juice
They've healed to watermelon seeds
...and the "dumbfuck" circularity. Isn't it strange how the tiniest things, the farthest from things yet connected things remind us of other things...and people.
Love is strong, San Pedro. Blood stronger when it's been through the grinder of time and experience together. You want to believe it will make a difference, leaving no brother behind...
The crimson pearls looked like pomegranate juice
They've healed to watermelon seeds
...and the "dumbfuck" circularity. Isn't it strange how the tiniest things, the farthest from things yet connected things remind us of other things...and people.
Love is strong, San Pedro. Blood stronger when it's been through the grinder of time and experience together. You want to believe it will make a difference, leaving no brother behind...
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re: Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 3:13am
lol ... Those cuts hurt, and dumbass that I am ... I kept kicking with the blood smeared in my leggings ... I was pissed that day ...
... the healing does look like seeds and I couldn't help but think of how I spent my summers with this cousin ... Like brothers we fought with and for each other ... Somewhere in there we got older but he never grew up ...
I feel an obligation because his mother was my favorite aunt, ugh ... The times that bind! Thanks for read and words.
... the healing does look like seeds and I couldn't help but think of how I spent my summers with this cousin ... Like brothers we fought with and for each other ... Somewhere in there we got older but he never grew up ...
I feel an obligation because his mother was my favorite aunt, ugh ... The times that bind! Thanks for read and words.
Re: get my cell ready
5th Jul 2015 8:35pm
this hits home. the struggle of being an enabler versus loving the person and trying to help them out is real. very, very real. you capture that here with much clarity. well done.
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re: Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 3:19am
Thank you for this ... Sadly, or fortunately, my mom was the same with his mother (her sister) ... She'd often buy groceries for her when she didn't have money (alcoholic) - took care of when she was diagnosed with cancer ... Had the foresight to get her life insurance before her prognosis so she could be buried with dignity ...
Yeah I leaned the worst shit from my mom (j/k lol ...)
Thanks for reading
Yeah I leaned the worst shit from my mom (j/k lol ...)
Thanks for reading
Re: get my cell ready
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5th Jul 2015 8:44pm
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re: Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 3:35am
Thank you for your honest opinion, nothing to be humble about ...
I wrote this as I felt ... Pretty much as a one shot for a competition called "Talking to Yourself" ... So I didn't pick at pacing - phrasing - spelling -use of poetic tools as much as I might other pieces ... I just spit it ... Literally right onto the page, which is rare for me. Not an excuse - just explaining my process on this ...
Thank you for the overall compliment on my writing, hopefully my "best" is yet to be written ... Otherwise I'm in trouble ...
Cheers
I wrote this as I felt ... Pretty much as a one shot for a competition called "Talking to Yourself" ... So I didn't pick at pacing - phrasing - spelling -use of poetic tools as much as I might other pieces ... I just spit it ... Literally right onto the page, which is rare for me. Not an excuse - just explaining my process on this ...
Thank you for the overall compliment on my writing, hopefully my "best" is yet to be written ... Otherwise I'm in trouble ...
Cheers
Re: get my cell ready
5th Jul 2015 9:28pm
Power and raw baring, love this!
Soo familiar in the reaction to family. almost
always the script..
enjoyed poet!
have great days ;)
~d
Soo familiar in the reaction to family. almost
always the script..
enjoyed poet!
have great days ;)
~d
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re: Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 3:40am
Thank you d ... It's always great when others can relate to the moment .. The situation just stirred a lot in me, some good - some bad ... including seeing that thin line between that life and mine ...
Salud
Salud
Re: get my cell ready
Anonymous
- Edited 5th Jul 2015 9:59pm
5th Jul 2015 9:57pm
Hey, I see you've got poetry Tourette's too, dumbfuck... hehe.
"I cut open my knees not so long ago
300 lb heavy bag
The crimson pearls looked like pomegranate juice
They've healed to watermelon seeds"
This was my favourite visual from this piece. It reminds me of when I pull a splinter from the skin that's been there a while, and blood doesn't know if it should stay or go. And when it does, it's gritty. The body is funny like that.
Btw, "Im pounding that bag again" - there's an apostrophe missing. Just a small observation.
I like this poem. It doesn't give much of a fuck, even though it might want to on the surface.
Thank you for the read.
"I cut open my knees not so long ago
300 lb heavy bag
The crimson pearls looked like pomegranate juice
They've healed to watermelon seeds"
This was my favourite visual from this piece. It reminds me of when I pull a splinter from the skin that's been there a while, and blood doesn't know if it should stay or go. And when it does, it's gritty. The body is funny like that.
Btw, "Im pounding that bag again" - there's an apostrophe missing. Just a small observation.
I like this poem. It doesn't give much of a fuck, even though it might want to on the surface.
Thank you for the read.
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re: Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 3:48am
You're right on the surface I wanna say ... Not my problem.
But there are ties. I use to be jealous of him because I thought our grandmother favored him more ... So I'd beat him up ...
Thanks for the grammar check ... I'll fix it.
Cheers ... And as always thanks for the read.
But there are ties. I use to be jealous of him because I thought our grandmother favored him more ... So I'd beat him up ...
Thanks for the grammar check ... I'll fix it.
Cheers ... And as always thanks for the read.
Re: get my cell ready
5th Jul 2015 10:46pm
You can use all the dumb fuck references you want
I get you Lo
Outstanding entry
Dumb fuck Like
I get you Lo
Outstanding entry
Dumb fuck Like
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re: Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 3:54am
LMDFAO! ... I knew you'd get it! ... You always get my raw and real voice, and it's much appreciated brotha.
Wore my duffer's cap today thinking of you Sir.
Wore my duffer's cap today thinking of you Sir.
Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 5:21am
awesome raw ink LobodeSan... you definitely went in this one... thx for sharing this *daps*
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re: Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 6:41am
Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 5:27am
re: Re: get my cell ready
6th Jul 2015 6:49am
Preaching and teaching on one side ... Jail & bail - and rehab on the other. Made for great holidays.
Thanks for the time John
Thanks for the time John
Re. get my cell ready
26th Jul 2015 6:39pm
Re: Re. get my cell ready
26th Jul 2015 6:44pm
Thanks for the comment ... Greatly appreciated. Thanks for subscribing as well.