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Broken
Half of my body suffers in mid-life crisis
While the other side slumbers nearer to death
A stoke will do that as it strips you bare
Wishing as well to feel nothing inside
My skin beginning to wither with lines
Fools my reflection to think the mirror has cracked
Kidnapped and held prisoner beneath an unmarked gravestone
That hovers above to hide my dying inner child
Nothing and no one can reverse the numbing effect
That robs my left limbs of once average strength
Barely able to hold the cane that helps stand me up
The dead cells in my brain form bars on my eyes
While the shadow of my memory fades like the night
Treason most fowl to deny lovely visions so fair
Who are lost to my heart and the rest that has died
While the other side slumbers nearer to death
A stoke will do that as it strips you bare
Wishing as well to feel nothing inside
My skin beginning to wither with lines
Fools my reflection to think the mirror has cracked
Kidnapped and held prisoner beneath an unmarked gravestone
That hovers above to hide my dying inner child
Nothing and no one can reverse the numbing effect
That robs my left limbs of once average strength
Barely able to hold the cane that helps stand me up
The dead cells in my brain form bars on my eyes
While the shadow of my memory fades like the night
Treason most fowl to deny lovely visions so fair
Who are lost to my heart and the rest that has died
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Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 7:59am
Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 4:02pm
https://www.ideasforleaders.com/sites/default/files/357_matisse_painting_from_his_sick_bed.jpg
Like Matisse, even in your wretched condition, you strive to enter those still unexplored arenas of the heart and mind, even describing the intimacy of the very demons which attack you....this is the highest form of art. To take that moment while falling from the ledge to pluck the sweetest strawberry, this is the heart of Zen.
Like Matisse, even in your wretched condition, you strive to enter those still unexplored arenas of the heart and mind, even describing the intimacy of the very demons which attack you....this is the highest form of art. To take that moment while falling from the ledge to pluck the sweetest strawberry, this is the heart of Zen.
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re: Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 7:41pm
Thank you RT, that was quite a comment! Expressing what's happening is the only way to survive the dark times... jj
Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 4:27pm
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3rd Jul 2015 7:43pm
Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 4:53pm
"That hovers above to hide my dying inner child"
~you have great shiny inner child still, remember
midlife means half left.. cover ground m'dear!
"Treason most fowl to deny lovely visions so fair"
~ooohh.. I fleckin feeel this one, using big
old-lady font til my glasses are ready. nicely put.
Somber yet still lovely JJ!
huggs hun & goodluk in the comp'n.
~d/T
~you have great shiny inner child still, remember
midlife means half left.. cover ground m'dear!
"Treason most fowl to deny lovely visions so fair"
~ooohh.. I fleckin feeel this one, using big
old-lady font til my glasses are ready. nicely put.
Somber yet still lovely JJ!
huggs hun & goodluk in the comp'n.
~d/T
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re: Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 7:48pm
Thanks d/T! Your comments always warm my heart. Competitions are not much of a reason to write a poem, especially since I hardly ever win them, but as introspective poems are my favorite to both read and write, the Reflections caught my eye... jj
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3rd Jul 2015 10:27pm
Sweet JJ.....maybe your physical body has changed on the outside in.....but one thing I'm sure of.....is the heart and soul that lays beneath your skin...is just as sweet as ever....I'm sure always will be.....excellent write of emotions of reality.....xo :)
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re: Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 11:39pm
Thank you G! You make me feel all pirple inside when you say such sweet things to me... :) jj
Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 11:35pm
I can feel myself relating to this down the road. I'm only seventeen now but I'm making it a goal of mine to never lose my inner child. Life would be so boring without her:)
Stay young at heart!:)
Heartfelt write...
Stay young at heart!:)
Heartfelt write...
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re: Re: I Am Broken
3rd Jul 2015 11:43pm
Thank you Kitty! It's a double edged sword to stay young at heart, especially so in the mind. There is an overwhelming feeling of futility when I see a beutiful young lady and realize I am invisible to her heart and repulsive to her eyes. But I can dream... JJ
Re: I Am Broken
4th Jul 2015 1:50am
This poem effectively pulls the reader the reader through a cascade of pain within numbness. A striking contrast that. Tugs at the heart, and yet one can see your soul shining beneath still.
Michael
Michael
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4th Jul 2015 2:14am
Re. Broken
19th Jul 2015 1:45am
"That robs my left limbs of once average strength"...Love that line. Thanks for sharing.
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