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HOTEL ~
On the outside I'm innocent,corrupt as hell on the inside
but he knew that; that was a scab he wanted to rip off,
His imagination was stimulated,
Those line's he used so many time's before, on other dames,
he knew they'd never work on me; my stocking covered thighs
were too strong for boyish talk,
He placed wing's around the corners of his mouth so his
word's would be smooth, took a drag from his cigarette,
and pretended he wasn't aroused; I pretended not to notice,
Pretended I didn't want to throw myself onto him,
Wanting him to want me; to tremble with want,
His breathing stops; the burning in his chest is passion; he's
caught in my smokey eye's, our hands touch, our lust
exposed but hidden,
Ready for his hands to set my sex free; as the moonlight
breaks through the window, him and I pour our nudity
onto the single bed,
The neon sign humming outside; flashing a bad bulb,
the letter O from HOTEL was burning out,
as we fucked; Oh yes, we fucked
but he knew that; that was a scab he wanted to rip off,
His imagination was stimulated,
Those line's he used so many time's before, on other dames,
he knew they'd never work on me; my stocking covered thighs
were too strong for boyish talk,
He placed wing's around the corners of his mouth so his
word's would be smooth, took a drag from his cigarette,
and pretended he wasn't aroused; I pretended not to notice,
Pretended I didn't want to throw myself onto him,
Wanting him to want me; to tremble with want,
His breathing stops; the burning in his chest is passion; he's
caught in my smokey eye's, our hands touch, our lust
exposed but hidden,
Ready for his hands to set my sex free; as the moonlight
breaks through the window, him and I pour our nudity
onto the single bed,
The neon sign humming outside; flashing a bad bulb,
the letter O from HOTEL was burning out,
as we fucked; Oh yes, we fucked
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Re: HOTEL ~
2nd Jul 2015 4:59pm
Excellent noir atmosphere, and a real turn on. I'm going to check in using an alias. I'll bring the cheap gin and smokes. Be prepared.
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2nd Jul 2015 6:39pm
Haha....now I'm curious as to what your alias
will be, I'll bring
the dirty glasses (but I'm not above drinking straight from
the bottle)....cigarettes, yes please! I'm ready! :) Thanks Crow! ;)
will be, I'll bring
the dirty glasses (but I'm not above drinking straight from
the bottle)....cigarettes, yes please! I'm ready! :) Thanks Crow! ;)
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2nd Jul 2015 8:21pm
DAMN!...no really DAMN! this is so sexy. I can smell the smells, see the dimly lit room, hear the desperate moans and see the erotic beauty. This line makes me stand completely at attention:
" him and I pour our nudity
onto the single bed, "
" him and I pour our nudity
onto the single bed, "
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2nd Jul 2015 8:36pm
So happy you could feel this write GW, I was hoping
the reader would! Thank you for your comment and
putting it on your RL! :)
the reader would! Thank you for your comment and
putting it on your RL! :)
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2nd Jul 2015 8:54pm
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2nd Jul 2015 9:08pm
Like GW I like the penultimate verse too. New one on me but a powerfully erotic picture presented to the mind.
Last verse suggests they used up some electricity!
Last verse suggests they used up some electricity!
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3rd Jul 2015 11:32pm
now That is a woman. every man wants to be slick enough to be with her..
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4th Jul 2015 5:28pm
you have a amazing imagery with words... very hot and seductive... i enjoyed this wonderful ink
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4th Jul 2015 8:53pm
... him and I pour our nudity onto the single bed ...
Great line!
If you haven't already ... You and JohnF should do a collaboration ... I'm sure it'd be volcanic.
Great line!
If you haven't already ... You and JohnF should do a collaboration ... I'm sure it'd be volcanic.
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5th Jul 2015 6:39pm
No we haven't written together, his word's are SO good! I'm not too sure I'm worthy enough! He's the best! Thank you LSP for your wonderful comment. :)
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