deepundergroundpoetry.com
Shapes~
Without those word's I'm bodiless
and deaf
What's a volcano without heat
and fire~
Thoughts of you pouring over
my skin
A stinging kiss from inked lips
You were my habit
bringing me to life~
Your word's move through me
like flames through smoke
If only I could place my hand upon
yours as you write~
I'd undo you as you have undone me
So we could be caught in the shapes
of our poems~
and deaf
What's a volcano without heat
and fire~
Thoughts of you pouring over
my skin
A stinging kiss from inked lips
You were my habit
bringing me to life~
Your word's move through me
like flames through smoke
If only I could place my hand upon
yours as you write~
I'd undo you as you have undone me
So we could be caught in the shapes
of our poems~
Published 2nd Jul 2015
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 5
reading list entries 0
comments 13
reads 850
Commenting Preference:
The author is looking for friendly feedback.
2nd Jul 2015 1:27am
"If only I could place my hand upon / yours as you write." It doesn't require physical contact to be a muse. You manage very well, and someone might be returning the favor. Coming undone in the best possible sense. Fine work Tommie!
Just to be able to touch as the thoughts are flowing out of one's mind onto paper,that would be very nice. I think about that often! That feeling and all that happens afterwards! I always appreciate your feedback crow,you give me thing's to think about. Thank you very much ;)
Tommie you inspire me! This conjures such beautifully sensual images. I may just have to write them down :)
"What's a volcano without heat
and fire~" is a thought provoking passage.
"What's a volcano without heat
and fire~" is a thought provoking passage.
2nd Jul 2015 12:23pm
2nd Jul 2015 6:19am
Favourite verse - last. "I'll undo you as you have undone me"...can see a bedroom scene coming.
2nd Jul 2015 12:24pm
2nd Jul 2015 2:19pm
2nd Jul 2015 3:50pm
3rd Jul 2015 9:24pm
there's a quote that says, 'I thought I wanted to be a poet, but what I really wanted was to be a poem.'
you're my poem, Tommie...
you're my poem, Tommie...
3rd Jul 2015 10:36pm
That comment takes my breath away, I curtsy before you
John! Thank you deeply :)
John! Thank you deeply :)
4th Jul 2015 12:20pm
4th Jul 2015 12:21pm
Breathtaking... And relatable to everyone who appreciates good poetry. With just the right amount of sensuality. 2nd stanza might be my favorite... It's hard to choose:)
5th Jul 2015 6:44pm
