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Sound
I felt his hardness in the very center of me
Was not allowed the luxury of sound
No moan, no shudder, no release from all the pressure rising
I felt like a balloon with too much air
And his hand, around my throat, like I was hanging from the gallows
My feet were curled and trying to climb the sheets
Eyes bulging and pleading
I would die or cum
One hard thrust and yes! He was filling me
I was pulsing around him
And finally he said speak
"thank you Sir, I love you.
Was not allowed the luxury of sound
No moan, no shudder, no release from all the pressure rising
I felt like a balloon with too much air
And his hand, around my throat, like I was hanging from the gallows
My feet were curled and trying to climb the sheets
Eyes bulging and pleading
I would die or cum
One hard thrust and yes! He was filling me
I was pulsing around him
And finally he said speak
"thank you Sir, I love you.
Written by
calamitygin
(Jennifer Michael McCurry)
Published 22nd Jun 2015
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Re: Sound
22nd Jun 2015 8:32am
found the quick intensity. the build-up was there before the poem began, then rapidly the dynamic releasing comes, & you are allowed to breathe again..
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22nd Jun 2015 8:40am
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22nd Jun 2015 9:27am
"thank you Sir, I love you."
Just so wonderful...I can't resist reading it over and over again.
Just so wonderful...I can't resist reading it over and over again.
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22nd Jun 2015 9:32am
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22nd Jun 2015 8:55pm
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22nd Jun 2015 9:07pm
Means a lot coming from you. I read some of your work. Divine. I'll be reading more for sure.
re: Re: Sound
22nd Jun 2015 10:45pm
Thank you very much. I wrote it quickly, in the middle of the night. I guess it needed to come out.
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23rd Jun 2015 6:54am
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13th Jul 2015 6:32am
the word use in this one, thoughts of what went on in history, and the deaths of a few people, including Michael Hutchence from INXS, make me a bit uneasy with this one...but that is probably just my personal hang-up (no pun intended) coming out
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re: Re: Sound
13th Jul 2015 6:52am
There was no real auto erotic asphyxiation. That is dangerous. The games between me and Sir are controlled, and absolute role play. But you reacted, you felt uneasy, that's something. Not my intention, but something.
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13th Jul 2015 6:54am
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13th Jul 2015 7:24am
Yes feeling uneasy isn't always a bad thing. One of my favorite politicians, Robert F. Kennedy, made several people feel uncomfortable, even after he was supposed to have "softened" after losing his brother. U2, Peter Gabriel, Jackson Browne, Norm Chomsky, and Cornel West also have that tendency.
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13th Jul 2015 7:31am
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re: Re: Sound
14th Jul 2015 2:48am
Yes Taryn, trust is so important to the sub, and Dom. A good sub Dom relationship is intimate and empowering for both partners. Thanks for reading! 💋
Re: Sound
15th Jul 2015 3:25am
Intense read. Felt the need for release and when it shuttered and busted out it took your breath away.
Truly enjoyed
Truly enjoyed
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15th Jul 2015 3:35am
Sound
15th Jul 2015 4:45pm
The sound of breathing and our voice is very comfortable. You gave that reassurance to the reader to be turned on with those final words. The picture only heightens my imagination.
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Re: Sound
15th Jul 2015 6:14pm
Thank you so much. I tried to make the reader hungry for the words. Bless you doll! 💋
Re. Sound
3rd Aug 2015 3:13am
freakin luv this..the intensity..your words/metaphors..so picturesque..
"I felt like a balloon with too much air" ...wow..
how that encapsulates so much
captivating vibe this surely is..
yes ma'am!!
"I felt like a balloon with too much air" ...wow..
how that encapsulates so much
captivating vibe this surely is..
yes ma'am!!
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3rd Aug 2015 9:16am
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12th Dec 2015 5:35am
you definitely succeed in trying to make the reader hungry for the words. i ate this up, awesome piece. love it.
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12th Dec 2015 5:41am
Hi...love revisiting a piece..like an old friend. Thank you for that, your kind words, and read sweetheart!
Love
J
Love
J
Re. Sound
4th Apr 2016 7:19pm
"Eyes bulging and pleading"
Damn, Calamity!
Now I'm gonna have to hide this bulge in my pants every time I stand up.
Damn, Calamity!
Now I'm gonna have to hide this bulge in my pants every time I stand up.
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