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Hold me
I wish you'd hold me for awhile.
Make the world go away.
Coddle me a bit.
You don't have to commit or anything.
Just hold me for a time. Assuage my grief.
Make the world go away.
Coddle me a bit.
You don't have to commit or anything.
Just hold me for a time. Assuage my grief.
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Re: Hold me
2nd Jun 2015 4:03am
wow, so good Savaja,
u are a gift!! this is so innocently soft... awwwww I love you gurly
Zazzles xxooxox
u are a gift!! this is so innocently soft... awwwww I love you gurly
Zazzles xxooxox
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re: Re: Hold me
4th Jun 2015 2:00am
Zazzles, luv ~ :-*
YOU are the gift! :-* Thank you so for your reaction to this, luv. Twas written in a moment of extreme vulnerability recently.
You are so very sweet (even with your fiery temperament ;-*) and such a font of immense love. :-*
YOU are the gift! :-* Thank you so for your reaction to this, luv. Twas written in a moment of extreme vulnerability recently.
You are so very sweet (even with your fiery temperament ;-*) and such a font of immense love. :-*
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4th Jun 2015 2:17am
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5th Jun 2015 4:40am
Ah, Zazzles ~
You are such a glorious soul, luv. I cannot help but love you in return. :-*
You are such a glorious soul, luv. I cannot help but love you in return. :-*
Re: Hold me
2nd Jun 2015 4:25am
Just these few words, made me sink..
For I know a place resembling this one, that void where no one dares to go anymore because all are in such of a rush, instead of lingering for while to massage one's lungs & soul . so that oxygen may be given as a selfless gift, genuine reciprocation ..
For I know a place resembling this one, that void where no one dares to go anymore because all are in such of a rush, instead of lingering for while to massage one's lungs & soul . so that oxygen may be given as a selfless gift, genuine reciprocation ..
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re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 4:44am
Noire HowlingWhelms, luv ~ :-*
You understand me well. I struggle to draw within that breath just now, that healing oxygen...
I am quite a mess just now.
Thank you, luv, so much. :-*
You understand me well. I struggle to draw within that breath just now, that healing oxygen...
I am quite a mess just now.
Thank you, luv, so much. :-*
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5th Jun 2015 4:46am
Re: Hold me
2nd Jun 2015 5:20am
it's a simple request, & reaches those, close & far. close your eyes & imagine it, across the miles...
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re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 4:51am
Ahhh, JohnFeddeler, luv ~ :-*
You have touched the very core of me. Now, luv, close your eyes and imagine my inescapable response to such tenderness bestowed... :-*
You have touched the very core of me. Now, luv, close your eyes and imagine my inescapable response to such tenderness bestowed... :-*
Re: Hold me
2nd Jun 2015 5:45am
The most honest of pleas, innocent and heart-tugging. To hear this plea takes as much courage as it does to make it.
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re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 5:07am
Ahhh, Atakti, luv ~ :-*
Profound loss can reduce us to children again from where, mayhap, pleas such as this emanate. Hearing them takes us back to that childlike vulnerability as well, eh?
Thank you for your courage and for intimating such in me. I know not that I have that within, but I am heartily grateful for your suggestion. :-*
Profound loss can reduce us to children again from where, mayhap, pleas such as this emanate. Hearing them takes us back to that childlike vulnerability as well, eh?
Thank you for your courage and for intimating such in me. I know not that I have that within, but I am heartily grateful for your suggestion. :-*
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re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 5:13am
Re: Hold me
2nd Jun 2015 6:55pm
The world could do with more holding
less hitting more holding
less shooting more holding
less angry shouts more being-held-sighs
less tears more contented smiles
less vitriol more kissing
less war more embracing
Thank you Savaja foe taking me to a better place.
less hitting more holding
less shooting more holding
less angry shouts more being-held-sighs
less tears more contented smiles
less vitriol more kissing
less war more embracing
Thank you Savaja foe taking me to a better place.
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re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 5:22am
Gahddess_Worship, luv ~ :-*
You are absolutely correct. Though, tears can be a cleansing thing and a relief... :-*
You are most welcome, luv. :-*
Thank You for seeing that in this...
You are absolutely correct. Though, tears can be a cleansing thing and a relief... :-*
You are most welcome, luv. :-*
Thank You for seeing that in this...
Re: Hold me
2nd Jun 2015 7:22pm
re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 5:27am
Ahhh, VegasPoet, luv ~ :-*
I am grateful, indeed, I have not asked too much of that which I want... ;-*
Too much sass, luv? ;-p
I Am glad You loved this. :-*
Thank You.
Ahhh yes...Sir. ;-p
I am grateful, indeed, I have not asked too much of that which I want... ;-*
Too much sass, luv? ;-p
I Am glad You loved this. :-*
Thank You.
Ahhh yes...Sir. ;-p
Re: Hold me
3rd Jun 2015 1:25am
Sweet write, Savaja. We all need this from time to time. Just to be held and accepted. To let loose and cry and cleanse the emotion.
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re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 5:36am
Pishashee, luv ~ :-*
You see me. You see the heart of me and know. Such truth resonates within your words, luv. :-*
Thank you for your keen understanding.
You see me. You see the heart of me and know. Such truth resonates within your words, luv. :-*
Thank you for your keen understanding.
Re: Hold me
4th Jun 2015 5:34pm
re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 5:39am
Ahhh, xmar82, luv ~ :-*
You are right, luv, so acutely right, an arrow to the source. :-*
Thank you ever so much, luv, for the hugs you're sending for I am in dire need and I am most earnestly grateful. :-*
You are right, luv, so acutely right, an arrow to the source. :-*
Thank you ever so much, luv, for the hugs you're sending for I am in dire need and I am most earnestly grateful. :-*
Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 8:23am
This is such a pure, deep desire. I crave the very simple but sacred act of just...holding somebody. You reflect my recent desires exactly in this poem. Almost verbatim in fact...
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re: Re: Hold me
5th Jun 2015 10:06am
Ah, sammy4444, luv ~ :-*
It seems, of late, we are simpatico, eh? :-*
Tis well and well, luv. We'll muddle through together then, shall we? ;-p
It seems, of late, we are simpatico, eh? :-*
Tis well and well, luv. We'll muddle through together then, shall we? ;-p
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5th Jun 2015 6:09pm
We do seem to be beating with the same heartbeats lately, I think your words are more effective at the beauty of it though. And your comments always seem to accentuate my writing. ;)
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5th Jun 2015 7:08pm
Oh, luv ~
I don't know about my words being more beautifully effective; you write with such gossamer beauty, a delicacy of touch as though you handle what is fragile and precious, luv. That is a gift. :-*
I don't know about my words being more beautifully effective; you write with such gossamer beauty, a delicacy of touch as though you handle what is fragile and precious, luv. That is a gift. :-*
Re: Hold me
13th Jun 2015 8:57am
OOOOH Madam S
forgive me, filling your pages with more commentary, on your talent that I am beginning to adore.
the difference betwix a writer and poet in my opinion is a poet tells the whole story in the shortest possible way. The writer splashes a million words at it.
you have minimized your words in this (very different from your usual) and dare I say, outdone yourself. The restraint is lovely.
the imagery is perfect!
but what nails it for me, is that I so need a cuddler, just a cuddler in my life, and you put it down like that!
Al-x-
forgive me, filling your pages with more commentary, on your talent that I am beginning to adore.
the difference betwix a writer and poet in my opinion is a poet tells the whole story in the shortest possible way. The writer splashes a million words at it.
you have minimized your words in this (very different from your usual) and dare I say, outdone yourself. The restraint is lovely.
the imagery is perfect!
but what nails it for me, is that I so need a cuddler, just a cuddler in my life, and you put it down like that!
Al-x-
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re: Re: Hold me
13th Jun 2015 9:18am
Ahhh, Al, luv ~ :-*
No forgiveness necessary. Fill my pages, luv. :-* I'm rather adoring you as well.
Come cuddle with me, luv... :-*
No forgiveness necessary. Fill my pages, luv. :-* I'm rather adoring you as well.
Come cuddle with me, luv... :-*
Re: Hold me
1st Jul 2015 11:17pm
feel as if you climbed inside my head … so simply stated, but the impact hits your heart … beautiful Savaja ...
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re: Re: Hold me
2nd Jul 2015 4:23am
Thank you very, very, very much, jemac, luv. :-*
Your response evokes a strong resonance within me as though a connection just realigned, one that was lost, mayhap, regained. :-*
Your response evokes a strong resonance within me as though a connection just realigned, one that was lost, mayhap, regained. :-*