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Serpent
I want to get away
All the way
Far away from my memories
The fucked up future
My distorted past
Getting lost in my present state
I sense the serpent,
slither through my skin
I feel the venom moving to my brain
Eyes are hazy, my mind kind of dizzy
Heartbeat slowing as I my world comes crashing down
My friends scare me, because they’re screaming
Shaking me, telling me to get back up
I can’t hear the voices
Only high pitched noises
Paralyzed when the ambulance arrives
I sense the serpent,
slither through my skin
I feel the venom moving to my brain
Eyes are hazy, my mind kind of dizzy
Heartbeat slowing as I my world comes crashing down
I wake up puking
My girlfriend crying
Pleading for me to get some fucking help
All I could do is sit, nod and agree,
but really I have no idea what the fuck is going on
I sense the serpent,
slither through my skin
I feel the venom moving to my brain
Eyes are hazy, my mind kind of dizzy
Heartbeat slowing as I my world comes crashing down
Every day without is hurt
Physical hurt
Itching skin and massive headaches
With my mood swings being so destructive
I just want to go back
To how I was
I just want to go back
Before the drugs
All the way
Far away from my memories
The fucked up future
My distorted past
Getting lost in my present state
I sense the serpent,
slither through my skin
I feel the venom moving to my brain
Eyes are hazy, my mind kind of dizzy
Heartbeat slowing as I my world comes crashing down
My friends scare me, because they’re screaming
Shaking me, telling me to get back up
I can’t hear the voices
Only high pitched noises
Paralyzed when the ambulance arrives
I sense the serpent,
slither through my skin
I feel the venom moving to my brain
Eyes are hazy, my mind kind of dizzy
Heartbeat slowing as I my world comes crashing down
I wake up puking
My girlfriend crying
Pleading for me to get some fucking help
All I could do is sit, nod and agree,
but really I have no idea what the fuck is going on
I sense the serpent,
slither through my skin
I feel the venom moving to my brain
Eyes are hazy, my mind kind of dizzy
Heartbeat slowing as I my world comes crashing down
Every day without is hurt
Physical hurt
Itching skin and massive headaches
With my mood swings being so destructive
I just want to go back
To how I was
I just want to go back
Before the drugs
Published 21st Apr 2015
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21st Apr 2015 3:53pm
22nd Apr 2015 5:37am
Anonymous
21st Apr 2015 4:30pm
This is intense! Feeling the pain through your words, I understand deeply how a bad addiction can take over your mind. You know it's bad but u just 'need' that fix. Amazing write
22nd Apr 2015 5:43am
Anonymous
21st Apr 2015 4:50pm
This is beautiful. Though no particular drug is mentioned, I get a heroin vibe.
22nd Apr 2015 5:45am
I wanted it to be open with what drug it might be, but yes it was heroin I was thinking of.
21st Apr 2015 6:46pm
Jesus, D, this scares me. Too much like the death I witnessed on my couch. It's more than a serpent when you are on the other side watching it all happen...it's fucking pain and fear; unique horror.
22nd Apr 2015 5:54am
Yeah, i wanted to be able to show a good view of how it's like. Though i'm not much of a drug user myself. I have alot of friends and family that are and i've seen it. I wanted to show how hard it could be for them even if i don't know first hand ^^
Glad you could enjoy :-)
Glad you could enjoy :-)
Anonymous
21st Apr 2015 7:12pm
Well there's nothing recreational about this piece especially if the MC wants to go back "Before the drugs"; it's obvious he's a junkie. If he/she weren't, they would've quit a long time ago. Stunning piece, DC. . .Devlin.
22nd Apr 2015 6:06am
21st Apr 2015 7:13pm
My husband has to take pills about 6 per day.
go without and oh ooOOH he itches manically and yeah don't mention the headaches
but he copes with it
the pills means he lives a normalistic life
just one if those things we deal with
Great read this DC
thankyou for uploading
go without and oh ooOOH he itches manically and yeah don't mention the headaches
but he copes with it
the pills means he lives a normalistic life
just one if those things we deal with
Great read this DC
thankyou for uploading
22nd Apr 2015 6:08am
Yeah, alot of us have to deal with icky meds ^^
Kind of sucks but have to get through the day :-)
Kind of sucks but have to get through the day :-)
21st Apr 2015 9:07pm
22nd Apr 2015 6:11am
Anonymous
21st Apr 2015 9:50pm
great! and love the pic
22nd Apr 2015 6:19am
21st Apr 2015 10:08pm
One hell of a write.
I can say that drugs can take over your life.
They turn you into a whole different person.
I hate it when people do that to themselves.
Great write though :)
I can say that drugs can take over your life.
They turn you into a whole different person.
I hate it when people do that to themselves.
Great write though :)
22nd Apr 2015 6:20am
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22nd Apr 2015 7:47am
Very deep.. Full of strong emotion.. Very much how I felt about my addiction..
22nd Apr 2015 7:50am
Glad you enjoyed ^^
Sorry to hear about your addiction.
Hope things got better or will get better :-)
*hug*
Sorry to hear about your addiction.
Hope things got better or will get better :-)
*hug*
25th Apr 2015 1:22am
sounds alot like me.... 13 years old in a rehab center... i guess it was good that it hit me early but sometimes i can still feel my mind wanting to give in and just find some pills and swallow... great read i really enjoy your writing style and the way you create your pieces
25th Apr 2015 1:58am
25th Apr 2015 7:02pm
I really enjoyed this work. I loved the repetition throughout and the story line.
26th Apr 2015 11:42am
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7th Nov 2016 5:05pm
That first stanza is just is stunning!!!
Such a raw and honest write... great ink, DC!
I just want to go back
To how I was
I just want to go back > how I can feel these lines...
Such a raw and honest write... great ink, DC!
I just want to go back
To how I was
I just want to go back > how I can feel these lines...
8th Nov 2016 6:40am
You know, I never understood why people enjoyed this poem from me. I like it myself but I wouldn't put it up there with my best.
But there are some really strong feelings and lines that went into this piece.
But there are some really strong feelings and lines that went into this piece.
