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Bipolar Coaster
First elation, then depression
A giddy rise in expectation
Hopes springing in the wind
Assurances that all will be well
Everything the brightest hues
Music rising from the asphalt
Warmth and comic smoke
But then, the inevitable then
Snickers it was all for show
Self-deception in its ragged form
A fantasy grown to mocking proportions
A projection slipping through the turnstile
Saying "Bye bye babe, nice try
Better luck next ride."
A giddy rise in expectation
Hopes springing in the wind
Assurances that all will be well
Everything the brightest hues
Music rising from the asphalt
Warmth and comic smoke
But then, the inevitable then
Snickers it was all for show
Self-deception in its ragged form
A fantasy grown to mocking proportions
A projection slipping through the turnstile
Saying "Bye bye babe, nice try
Better luck next ride."
Published 12th Apr 2015
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12th Apr 2015 4:21pm
This is a too familiar feeling. Excellent and disparaging write. Well worded.
12th Apr 2015 4:24pm
In a way I'm sorry to hear that Sammy. In another I'm glad it might have made sense to you. It's a syndrome that's hard for me to portray.
12th Apr 2015 6:20pm
I only get the depression part. But it has a distinct timing that ruins a lot of good days. I wish you the best my friend. Know you have people who understand what you go through.
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12th Apr 2015 4:42pm
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Manic depression is spoken of as one of the more treatable disorders, and this is true for some with the right meds. I think that varies widely in effectiveness. I have my good days and bad, but it's still worth the ride. Thanks so much Schiitaryn.
12th Apr 2015 5:12pm
i've been on this ride too many times to count...
... you've written this so well crowfly, like you've been between my synapses, plucking my thoughts
... you've written this so well crowfly, like you've been between my synapses, plucking my thoughts
12th Apr 2015 5:37pm
Thanks Katja. Sorry about your own coaster thrills, but I'm glad I'm not alone.
Anonymous
12th Apr 2015 5:14pm
I can relate to this roller coaster of emotions all too well, I think the way you have shared your feeling in an abstract way is truly remarkable. I love the way you express the harsher side of feelings with such intensity.
I love the last two lines especially, still hope, see you on the upside hunni!
I love the last two lines especially, still hope, see you on the upside hunni!
12th Apr 2015 5:40pm
I'm just glad it wasn't too abstract. And yes, I'll see you there, Jaded. The climb's the best part!
Anonymous
12th Apr 2015 6:18pm
Great write, Crowfly. The final three lines brought heaviness to the amusement park atmosphere.
12th Apr 2015 8:05pm
12th Apr 2015 10:48pm
You took the words right outta my mouth!!
(((((((((((((((((Thomas)))))))))))))))))
loves you Zazzles xoxoxoxoxoxo
(((((((((((((((((Thomas)))))))))))))))))
loves you Zazzles xoxoxoxoxoxo
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13th Apr 2015 6:20am
Wow
Lovely poetry mr. Crow.
Words are perfect and flow is praiseworthy.
Keep it up.
mcjay
Lovely poetry mr. Crow.
Words are perfect and flow is praiseworthy.
Keep it up.
mcjay
14th Apr 2015 2:10am
Thanks McJay. I'll try to keep it up as long as possible. It's a steep drop down...
13th Apr 2015 4:18pm
14th Apr 2015 2:11am
Yes they are, but I'm too chicken to actually get on one. Maybe I should face my fears.
14th Apr 2015 3:32pm
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Anonymous
15th Apr 2015 3:30am
music rising from the asphalt. been there.
isn't it funny to look back on those manic times? sometimes i wonder what in the world i was thinking.
this is well done, crow. very well done.
isn't it funny to look back on those manic times? sometimes i wonder what in the world i was thinking.
this is well done, crow. very well done.
15th Apr 2015 12:34pm
Whoa! That was dual-impacting, with such a light, heady jazz-carnival feeling from the cadence and pace and a horrifying flash from nighttime to daytime and back from the words. Fine craftsmanship crowfly, hope the clarity yields you some control of the condition as well.
