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gone silent these last months
been doing my living on the inside
went three days last week with not a word said
except to the dog
and even then didn’t need more than a couple
because he understands the pointed finger
and can read me by the things I do
knows the hat I put on for beach walks
better than any mouth-noise worth the making
I can feel a time coming
when maybe speaking is dead gone
and even do my sailing single-handed
putting aside the people
go it alone
cast off and sail
me
my boat
and the ocean
I think I might have been made this way
pond without ripples
smiling in solitude
eyes outward
used to be when I was young
that thoughts like this worried me
made me think I was going mad
feared solitude
or the need for it
like I was dropping out of the world
truth is that I was
needed to
but the courage was lacking
can see it now
can feel it
just don’t need you
not any of you
would rather watch the sea
than listen to more talk
lonely
sure
but only until I remember the alternative
and then it’s time to tweak a sail
or work on something down below
more silence
more work
and a cup of tea once in a while
to let a little something
get some way
in
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10th Mar 2015 11:58pm
been doing this for weeks on and off... good on you, introvert, recharging on the voices of the planet. [:
and yes, tea, and animals' company, and comfortable quiet doing something you love. the lonely times are the price we pay... i say it's better than unnecessary interpersonal dramatics. (part of that 'alternative' you mentioned, i'm sure...) *nod*
i really like how this is about going away with oneself, but the narrator doesn't retreat or speak from that nestled place inside. the idea is communicated openly. i was admiring that openness in another one of your much older pieces today, as a matter of fact. i was attempting to take from that lesson and apply it to something of my own... didn't work so well that time... i'll have another go later. [:
imma go get some tea.
Jay-to-the-Essssta
and yes, tea, and animals' company, and comfortable quiet doing something you love. the lonely times are the price we pay... i say it's better than unnecessary interpersonal dramatics. (part of that 'alternative' you mentioned, i'm sure...) *nod*
i really like how this is about going away with oneself, but the narrator doesn't retreat or speak from that nestled place inside. the idea is communicated openly. i was admiring that openness in another one of your much older pieces today, as a matter of fact. i was attempting to take from that lesson and apply it to something of my own... didn't work so well that time... i'll have another go later. [:
imma go get some tea.
Jay-to-the-Essssta
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11th Mar 2015 00:03am
Jay-to-the-esoteric, how right you are, in the wisdom of tea at the very least :-)
Am having one now, blues playing, dog at feet....good enough :-)
H....lowest priced model on the market.
Am having one now, blues playing, dog at feet....good enough :-)
H....lowest priced model on the market.
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11th Mar 2015 00:17am
makes perfect sense to me H. the need to not need and dog don't care,he's with ya on it. Whenever we speak on the perils of the world it's somehow always people connected. It'd actually be a nice fn place without some of us in it.
i like how you are not afraid to admit it, but not with a young rebel poor me attitude but a seasoned poor them.
keep it up brotha
JR
i like how you are not afraid to admit it, but not with a young rebel poor me attitude but a seasoned poor them.
keep it up brotha
JR
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11th Mar 2015 00:51am
Cheers man...small hymn, for a small life, but still a hymn needs telling :-)
Good on you man.
H....with extended warranty.
Good on you man.
H....with extended warranty.
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Anonymous
11th Mar 2015 00:51am
Man, hit it home for some one like me, a little younger than you. Still working on being okay with being alone.
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11th Mar 2015 1:00am
Mate...not saying it's for everyone, or that it's right for all time, but solitude is just fine if you can relax in to it without feeling like you're missing something, or hiding out....
the test is, how do you refuel...if you do it alone, then fine, do it alone.
H....new, but certainly not improved.
the test is, how do you refuel...if you do it alone, then fine, do it alone.
H....new, but certainly not improved.
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11th Mar 2015 1:22am
introverts unite! (separately of course.)
i appreciate that the speaker isn't hiding from the solitude. they are embracing it. proud of it almost. so often people who crave the privacy of their own thoughts are looked at, stereotypically, as withdrawn and trying to hide.
but not this guy. not you!
good one.
i appreciate that the speaker isn't hiding from the solitude. they are embracing it. proud of it almost. so often people who crave the privacy of their own thoughts are looked at, stereotypically, as withdrawn and trying to hide.
but not this guy. not you!
good one.
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11th Mar 2015 1:47am
Well....pride probably not, but acceptance yeah sure. When I look back on my life, the things I most valued were things I did alone (sailing, fight-training, long distance cycle touring...and the list goes on). I have always felt guilty, or somehow less, for not seeking the centre of the noise...I understand now.
Cheers my dear.
H....on loan from somewhere far classier.
Cheers my dear.
H....on loan from somewhere far classier.
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11th Mar 2015 3:40am
introspection & a viable plan: a man in his boat on the water. must be a great deal of joy there...
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11th Mar 2015 11:18pm
Jf, it's pretty good, even on a bad day (have to be careful there...the 'bad' days on a boat include much fear and discomfort)
Good man...
H....letting sleeping dogs lie...
Good man...
H....letting sleeping dogs lie...
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I feel I learn a little something everytime I read your writing, it's so simple yet so hard. I find myself getting caught up in descriptive words/synonyms which is fine because I like that type of thing, but when I read something like this, especially the first stanza, it makes me feel different about writing in a way I can't place. Somehow I think you'll understand what I'm saying.
Enjoyed...
Enjoyed...
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11th Mar 2015 11:16pm
Mate...maybe I do. All the decoration in the world won't hide a poorly build bridge, and poems, maybe, are like bridges. Writing is (maybe) good when it has strong foundations...after that then yeah, paint it up in all the pretty colours that you want...people focus on the decorations, long before they worry about what is holding the thing up....
Good luck to you man.
H....with barely a clue.
Good luck to you man.
H....with barely a clue.
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Maybe everyone should spend time in that place, sometime. Try it out, at least. It is my survival when the world gets too noisy in my head. Embracing that kind of lonliness takes away the lonely feeling, I find.
It must be so much more remote, tranquil, beautiful, peacful, in the middle of the Ocean. Luckily, I have mastered the art of switching off.
I love the serenity I find in this piece. Wonderful Hemi. :)
It must be so much more remote, tranquil, beautiful, peacful, in the middle of the Ocean. Luckily, I have mastered the art of switching off.
I love the serenity I find in this piece. Wonderful Hemi. :)
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11th Mar 2015 11:20pm
Cheers M...yes, it is all those things, and plenty more.
The art of 'switching off', is art/skill/matter of survival....I do it on land through mindfulness meditation, and on the water it just happens....
Loving the love my dear.
H....all at sea...
The art of 'switching off', is art/skill/matter of survival....I do it on land through mindfulness meditation, and on the water it just happens....
Loving the love my dear.
H....all at sea...
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11th Mar 2015 10:59am
I would love to give the solitude of sailing a try, but my inexperience at sea would likely get me killed out there. Spent several years living in the woods, BFE, soaking up over a half-decade of glorious loneliness. I would spend weeks, months not saying a word or seeing another human. Too much solitude eventually became unnatural, as humans are social creatures, & it changes how you relate to people. Still, it's hard to find these days, what with overpopulation & such. I have an actual job now, with insurance I desperately need, so I cant have that constant solitude anymore, because I have to live in town for this job. I miss it, living out there in wild nature, no one but me n' my ol' dog (RIP) Wish I could go back to that. Now all I get are momentary bursts of it, like you've adequately described here.
Wonderful ode to enjoyable loneliness, something I know well, hh.
Wonderful ode to enjoyable loneliness, something I know well, hh.
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11th Mar 2015 11:22pm
Mate I hear ya...solitude taken as a treat, and on our own terms is a luxury...solitude for longer than we need, or forced upon us, can rot a man out, or bend him bad...
I like your story, and can relate from my own time 'up in the hills' when I was younger...did a lot of hiking in the lonely hills, and loved it.
Cheers for laying your thoughts down.
H....with hardly a moments notice...
I like your story, and can relate from my own time 'up in the hills' when I was younger...did a lot of hiking in the lonely hills, and loved it.
Cheers for laying your thoughts down.
H....with hardly a moments notice...
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12th Mar 2015 2:46am
H the solitary in me loves the solitude and reclusive nature of you at times though I know you get down at the parties when in the mood to.. as I do as well.. laying it down straight up goes smooth down my throat.. great inking Sir with love and respect Brenda
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12th Mar 2015 3:10am
Ah B...I'm always partyin' on the inside, and yes, sometimes on the outside :-)
Good on you for digging the soli-songs :-)
H...for a short time only...
Good on you for digging the soli-songs :-)
H...for a short time only...
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14th Mar 2015 4:52am
This one sure seems popular... Who'd have guessed we'd all be introverts on a poetry site huh? Honestly I'm jealous you got some of the more glamourous introvert hobbies, all I got is burying my head in a book or going for a walk with Clapton blaring in my ears. I want a beach near me, the sound of waves is the most calming thing I've ever heard.
You took me on a trip here, it feels like lonely and comforting at the same time.
You took me on a trip here, it feels like lonely and comforting at the same time.
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14th Mar 2015 5:35am
fuck yeah…your 'glamour' comment had me laughing :-) Good on you for calling me out, while I swan around like a sailing fuckwit, composing odes to my solitude…It's total wank, upon reflection.
Thanks for letting me see it with fresh eyes :-)
H…..but not in a bad way
(nothin' wrong with a book…still better than herpes, after all these years…)
Thanks for letting me see it with fresh eyes :-)
H…..but not in a bad way
(nothin' wrong with a book…still better than herpes, after all these years…)
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15th Mar 2015 6:46am
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25th Mar 2015 7:05pm
Am v.late to your space to add on whatever I wanna say..surely, this is a piece resonating simple n lucid n btflly the heart n soul of any solitude seeker. As i always see this, you cut out perfectly geometrical with ur expressions, n that is like a heartout cry in a poetic dialogue with self n readers..that choatic struggle caught me more here as u mean, whether its the overdosed insanity or the v.craving need of this 'solitude' making it seem create the somewhat deep yet unjudged selfdoubt moments surfacing often...overall, this speaks out in a sacred silence to me, much loved scribe of urs! Tq fr this share hh the poet:)
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29th Mar 2015 8:55am
Ah my dear...never got back to see this...how piss poor of me...thank you for your generous comment, and always pleased to hear where your mind goes :-)
H....if indeed any h at all....
H....if indeed any h at all....
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22nd Apr 2015 11:54pm
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Anonymous
29th Apr 2015 2:48am
Sailed as a child. Love your poem. Brings back memories of the first time I soloed but without the trusty hound. Thanks for your poem.
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3rd May 2015 11:28am
I sometimes go days without talking and for a chatterbox that's a learning experience. Not enough is said for that.
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