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And He Says
sharing a cigarette
watching the glow
of oncoming dawn
I lean on his shoulder
and he says
I have a journey to make
I have a decision to take
the road will be long
I hold on to his warmth
shivering in nonexistent cold
blood draining into my heart
it is coming
and he says
goodbye my love goodbye
I will be back soon
before you feel my absence
I turn away
as he drives away
he is on his journey
and I know its the end
in my heart
the hollow echoes of his words
rebound, he says
goodbye goodbye goodbye.
watching the glow
of oncoming dawn
I lean on his shoulder
and he says
I have a journey to make
I have a decision to take
the road will be long
I hold on to his warmth
shivering in nonexistent cold
blood draining into my heart
it is coming
and he says
goodbye my love goodbye
I will be back soon
before you feel my absence
I turn away
as he drives away
he is on his journey
and I know its the end
in my heart
the hollow echoes of his words
rebound, he says
goodbye goodbye goodbye.
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Re: And He Says
8th Nov 2014 8:29am
Wow! I love this poem on so many levels. As the reader, you inked the emotion in a way that I could interpret and relate the story to my own experiences of saying goodbye. It stirred up old memories. Thank you. Great work.
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8th Nov 2014 10:49am
Thank you so much for reading and commenting, forever young. :) very kind of you.
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8th Nov 2014 9:11am
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8th Nov 2014 11:12am
Hi Shadoe. Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes its relatable isn't it. Sad though. :)
Re: And He Says
8th Nov 2014 1:43pm
I don't like goodbyes,it's sad to hear someone so dear say that even when the parting is temporal,but knowing it is the end...it can be mind-shattering. Good read Grace,well done.
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8th Nov 2014 3:20pm
Dustyjjewels:) thank you for reading. It is sad when someone leaves without telling the right reasons. It gives Love a bad name.
Re: And He Says
9th Nov 2014 11:46am
Aaaawwww this is so sad my friend
but tenderly expressed... strong
and touching spill...
but tenderly expressed... strong
and touching spill...
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9th Nov 2014 6:55pm
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Anonymous
9th Nov 2014 11:53am
Sad tale of tragedy
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Re: And He Says
10th Nov 2014 11:31pm
Such feeling to your words Grace...can really feel that shiver while you hold on to the his warmth.
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11th Nov 2014 3:26am
I'm sure you do:) I always fall on my face, you know. Not much beloved. Thanks for reading, Hashman.