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Into greener pastures
The wick of life and quenching dew
Shining iridescent o'er fair hills
On the margin of green pastures yonder
Where God's eye longs to stay still
Oh the green, lush, tranquil verdure
That sways brushed by cool winds
Moist by cold morning dew
And spectacle's light's many a hue.
Though we cannot forestall fate
There will come a day of drought
And mourn for the pasture barren
And grief for the pasture spring
My longing to stay shall remain
Eternal as memories shall never wane.
Shining iridescent o'er fair hills
On the margin of green pastures yonder
Where God's eye longs to stay still
Oh the green, lush, tranquil verdure
That sways brushed by cool winds
Moist by cold morning dew
And spectacle's light's many a hue.
Though we cannot forestall fate
There will come a day of drought
And mourn for the pasture barren
And grief for the pasture spring
My longing to stay shall remain
Eternal as memories shall never wane.
Published 6th Nov 2014
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6th Nov 2014 9:21am
Beautiful verse... the pastured spring from which Poesy doth flourishingly originate!
On technical note, I found the last line of the second stanza to be a bit grammatically awkward and hard to naturally envision ("And spectacle's light's many a hue") - not sure of any suggestions (I have a few glass of red wine in me!)
Also, the last line, "Eternal as memories shall never wane" is clearly grammatically incorrect, but ABSOLUTELY perfectly brilliant - so DON'T ever change that one!!!
On technical note, I found the last line of the second stanza to be a bit grammatically awkward and hard to naturally envision ("And spectacle's light's many a hue") - not sure of any suggestions (I have a few glass of red wine in me!)
Also, the last line, "Eternal as memories shall never wane" is clearly grammatically incorrect, but ABSOLUTELY perfectly brilliant - so DON'T ever change that one!!!
