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I'm in you~
Do my words not rush into you
like the summer breeze kissing
your face
Do you not see my womanly
figure before you like a white
star in the sky
Tell me you feel my shadow
cascading all around you
like a soft blanket
Tell me you can feel the joy
in the restless air when you
close your eyes
like the summer breeze kissing
your face
Do you not see my womanly
figure before you like a white
star in the sky
Tell me you feel my shadow
cascading all around you
like a soft blanket
Tell me you can feel the joy
in the restless air when you
close your eyes
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Re: I'm in you~
2nd Aug 2014 3:18pm
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2nd Aug 2014 4:00pm
Re: I'm in you~
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2nd Aug 2014 3:22pm
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re: Re: I'm in you~
2nd Aug 2014 4:01pm
Re: I'm in you~
Anonymous
2nd Aug 2014 4:03pm
This is great. Has the ghost of a chant to it, with the relentless questioning. Really appreciate how you used the form to your advantage, well done.
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re: Re: I'm in you~
2nd Aug 2014 4:09pm
Re: I'm in you~
2nd Aug 2014 8:16pm
When we commit ourselves wholeheartedly to someone, we absorb their essence and become one with them. Lovely write Tommie.
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Re: I'm in you~
2nd Aug 2014 9:39pm
Re: I'm in you~
3rd Aug 2014 8:15pm
Oh how we surround ourselves with the essence of our lovers. Beautiful words describing that, miss.
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