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Fishing
I could see him through
the ripples of the water
Getting his pole ready
teasing me,exciting me
He held it inches from
my inviting mouth
Tricking me he dipped
it in, letting it touch my lips
My tongue,already wet
wanting to taste it
And it happened, his pole
was inside me, I was caught
the ripples of the water
Getting his pole ready
teasing me,exciting me
He held it inches from
my inviting mouth
Tricking me he dipped
it in, letting it touch my lips
My tongue,already wet
wanting to taste it
And it happened, his pole
was inside me, I was caught
Published 30th Jul 2014
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30th Jul 2014 3:36am
FISHING is Good!!
Awesome write sweets!!!
Funny piece , Great read!!
Sir Lancelott
check me out sweets!
Awesome write sweets!!!
Funny piece , Great read!!
Sir Lancelott
check me out sweets!
30th Jul 2014 11:40am
30th Jul 2014 6:00am
Nice poem it had imagery and sensuality in a very lovely combination :)
30th Jul 2014 11:40am
30th Jul 2014 6:36am
Funny analogy of oral sex with fishing - a word also a metaphor for finding a mate. In our English vernacular "Getting his rod ready" would be the more usual alternative for "pole".
30th Jul 2014 11:41am
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30th Jul 2014 12:21pm
Anonymous
30th Jul 2014 3:54pm
Tommie Lynn,
LOL!!! I nearly fell out of my boat : ) I'm hooked and switching over to live bait! Heading back to the marina....
tornado
LOL!!! I nearly fell out of my boat : ) I'm hooked and switching over to live bait! Heading back to the marina....
tornado
30th Jul 2014 4:11pm
30th Jul 2014 9:29pm
31st Jul 2014 00:05am
30th Jul 2014 10:17pm
I love this! It's very clever...got me hooked. I love the teasing...the allure :)
31st Jul 2014 00:06am
31st Jul 2014 5:04am
My Dear Tommie,
As a frost bit redneck, from the North Woods, I can attest, you know how to tickle a hillbilly. As I once suggested to you some time ago, your poetry would be perfect for a reading at the Sturgis rally. Throw in a guy on bongos, and two sexy back round dancers, and we'll all be reading about you in Huffington Post.
As a frost bit redneck, from the North Woods, I can attest, you know how to tickle a hillbilly. As I once suggested to you some time ago, your poetry would be perfect for a reading at the Sturgis rally. Throw in a guy on bongos, and two sexy back round dancers, and we'll all be reading about you in Huffington Post.
31st Jul 2014 11:52am
Anonymous
31st Jul 2014 2:03pm
Great, great metaphor - lots of fun :)
31st Jul 2014 2:29pm
Anonymous
31st Jul 2014 3:52pm
Anytime - I like your voice, I'll keep reading.
31st Jul 2014 6:53pm
