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Sunder
Permanent grins pose while clothing flutters,
desolate flags of nothing. The roars and screams
have faded to dust and clicks, holding the page
wide open. Cue the moans, the thin slices of panic,
the breathless grief haunting each street.
Leave us be.
Our bones want to untwist, align with yesterday's ley lines
that said week followed week into the grey mists of heredity.
Pearl promises crack, chip, crumble in the rubble.
The light floods in, and we float on, hands unclasping
from silver wisp tethers. This pain is for the living.
Now, always.
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Re: Sunder
Anonymous
26th Jul 2014 00:13am
The freedom of ghosts..... Reminds me of GSYBE lyrics! Awesome, thanks again! Mike
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26th Jul 2014 6:39am
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26th Jul 2014 00:26am
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26th Jul 2014 2:07am
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26th Jul 2014 4:26am
Can't take this all the way in right now. Heavy piece. Lots of resonance
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26th Jul 2014 6:41am
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26th Jul 2014 11:08am
It feels like a show to me? the drama of presenting ourselfs to the world being who the world wants us to be? rather than who we are really♥ Please tell me your thoughts behind this♥
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re: Re: Sunder
27th Jul 2014 7:31am
That layer of outward appearances you see in this poem eludes me. That is not to say what you see is invalid, but I was obvious, I thought, in writing about the victims of war.
Whatever the political agenda is, at the end both sides count the bodies and grieve.
Whatever the political agenda is, at the end both sides count the bodies and grieve.
Re: Sunder
26th Jul 2014 11:14am
Ghosts of war's grief, misery.. victims in time and the karma of the aftermath resonate in pain and desolation. Echoes the lonely and betrayed; robbed before their time of life. Acutely written as an empathic poetess. Loved it!
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27th Jul 2014 7:32am
Re: Sunder
27th Jul 2014 6:10am
My first read took me to the scene of the downed plane in the Ukraine ... on the second read I caught "streets" - which led me to a war zone ...
Brilliant piece.
Brilliant piece.
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re: Re: Sunder
27th Jul 2014 7:38am
I have been avoiding the news, as my stomach sinks with every update. I finally had to release my feelings, so I wrote this. I felt better for all of two minutes, because this is still going on. The incident in the Ukraine is another one nagging at me. These are events too big to ignore - who knows, I may now have to respond with poetry to current events! This was my first one, but probably won't be my last commentary...
Many thanks, Lobo.
Many thanks, Lobo.
Re: Sunder
...Not use to You being so Quiet...then You pop back in every couple days and kick Works like this...Greatness!!!
Quite emotive Poetess!!!
...Oh...and the rhythmic sense...Spot On Kiddo!!!
Quite emotive Poetess!!!
...Oh...and the rhythmic sense...Spot On Kiddo!!!
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re: Re: Sunder
4th Aug 2014 5:57am
Aww, Soul, so glad you like it.
I was provoked into writing this. Thanks so much for reading.
I'm quiet cuz I'm away, trying to clear my head. The news didn't allow for much calm though, so I responded.
I was provoked into writing this. Thanks so much for reading.
I'm quiet cuz I'm away, trying to clear my head. The news didn't allow for much calm though, so I responded.
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4th Aug 2014 2:10pm
It is a must to breathe and live from time to time-Deep slow Breaths Dear!!!
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Re: Sunder
28th Jul 2014 00:08am
Phenomenally powerful opening of the permanence of death - especially of the innocent - great to see poetry used as a tool of the conscience
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re: Re: Sunder
4th Aug 2014 5:59am
Tool of conscience? Would poetry change the world?! Imagine if it did, DU would crash in seconds...
Thank you for your kind words.
Thank you for your kind words.
Re: Sunder
4th Aug 2014 6:42am
artful portrayal of the tragedies that we share this planet with. just gets closer every day...
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re: Re: Sunder
23rd Aug 2014 6:42am
It's not 'way over there' anymore. It is happening to all of us.
Thanks, Feddeler!
Thanks, Feddeler!