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I retract my statement.
Yes, that statement
and that one.
Indeed, I retract
all the statements I've made
through these pitiable attempts
at poetry.
It's not my area, this.
I belong in the corps of the mediocre blog,
that is if I dare to inflict yet more
of this unnatural bile upon our poor
letter-cluttered world.
I dabble, I don't swim in the seas of intensity
nibble, don't chomp on the muscles of life
and eyes turned down, I twiddle my thumbs
in the company
of imagination.
My metaphors are used -
words badly recycled to mar my page
my thoughts revert
to skipping tracks
I foam and churn
to extract
express.
Poetry requires perspective and flair.
I'll try it again when I have some.
Yes, that statement
and that one.
Indeed, I retract
all the statements I've made
through these pitiable attempts
at poetry.
It's not my area, this.
I belong in the corps of the mediocre blog,
that is if I dare to inflict yet more
of this unnatural bile upon our poor
letter-cluttered world.
I dabble, I don't swim in the seas of intensity
nibble, don't chomp on the muscles of life
and eyes turned down, I twiddle my thumbs
in the company
of imagination.
My metaphors are used -
words badly recycled to mar my page
my thoughts revert
to skipping tracks
I foam and churn
to extract
express.
Poetry requires perspective and flair.
I'll try it again when I have some.
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How ironic...
4th Apr 2011 5:19pm
...to express these sentiments in a well-crafted poem with insight, imagination, and a cool theme. And you know, I don't think the self-doubt ever goes away. I love this, as well as your "perspective and flair". Good piece!
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4th Apr 2011 7:00pm
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Anonymous
4th Apr 2011 5:29pm
Like Lauren, I find it ironic that you express such dissatisfaction with your own work through startling intensity and uniqueness. None of us are ever completely satisfied with what we produce, at least not until some decades have passed and we've learned to be objective about ourselves. I hope it helps when I say you're a thousand times more qualified (if qualifications existed for poetry) to write in this form than a lot of amateurs I've read, however.
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4th Apr 2011 7:01pm
keep
4th Apr 2011 6:05pm
doing it...try not to over think it jesta...in fact kick the arse out of it!!!
looking backwards is never as exciting as all the other options :_)
looking backwards is never as exciting as all the other options :_)
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4th Apr 2011 7:23pm
I like poems about poetry. It's a good topic, and has the positive aspect that poets are generally at least somewhat acquainted with (and interested in) the subject. This piece in particular, while not your personal best, is certainly worth reading (by more than just the smarmy types in the "corps of the mediocre blog").
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4th Apr 2011 7:32pm
thank you so much, Mike. i just hate cluttering the place with more unexceptionals so i put another unexceptional out there instead of burning everything. go figure. [:
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4th Apr 2011 8:18pm
Well I didn't quite mean it like that; your version of unexceptional is quite exceptional relative to the rest of the unexceptional stuff on here, because at least this piece is well-written, with good imagery, style and flow. I think that got lost, but it was supposed to be a compliment the first time around!
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oh, i know! sorry, i knew it was meant to be a compliment.. (and i did take it as such!) that's just me being 'realistic' about my own writing. i must agree i have a good one or two, but this one was tossed together all in one go so i wouldn't have thought much of it myself. i much appreciate the feedback, Mike. haha, muchas gracias. [:
If I May Mirror .......
4th Apr 2011 7:25pm
.......the comments of the other post, perfection comes through doing. perfection ironically is never achieved but it will destine you overtime to produce your absolute best. This work is extremely good. Keep at it : )
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4th Apr 2011 7:34pm
honored to have you stop in, Mr. M, and appreciate the encouragement. think i just need to read more. i always get this way after a writing spurt wears off. [:
You gem
5th Apr 2011 7:36am
Glorious! Beautiful! Somehow, your doubt in yourself lends an even more delicate, extravagant meaningfullness to your already brilliant writing!
Don't ever stop Jes....
Don't ever stop Jes....
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5th Apr 2011 8:05am
LA
5th Apr 2011 7:58am
Oh, J, I'm not even going to indulge you in your self-doubt. Look at the craft and tell me the writer isn't just insecure. It's lovely and it's publish worthy. Beautiful work.
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re: LA
you do flatter me extravagantly, darling. thank you for the encouraging words, really. i'm just having a moment. [:
Extremely talented
5th Apr 2011 8:05am
You are one of the most talented writers i've read and this poem is gorgeous in it's honest thoughts..peace Crim
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5th Apr 2011 8:06am
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6th Apr 2011 2:19pm
Superb
2nd May 2011 11:59pm
Your line breaks make this a masterpiece. I love the feeling of disgust that underlies this work as beautiful as it is.
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3rd May 2011 7:54am
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30th Apr 2016 8:40am
I doubt I'd like any poet who hasn't felt this way at some point or another. Superb write. The seeming ease of which has me more than a wee bit jealous :)
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3rd May 2016 00:21am
why, thank you, kind stranger [:
pretty much feel this way every day, let it take over and one will just never get round to giving it another go..... thanks much for taking the time to skip back into the annals..... we do appreciate the attention back here [:
pretty much feel this way every day, let it take over and one will just never get round to giving it another go..... thanks much for taking the time to skip back into the annals..... we do appreciate the attention back here [: