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Savoring The Pain
Your indifference
is maddening
crazy thing though
I love the pain of it
chewing glass
spitting blood onto the page
mixed with venom, pretty poison
you darlin are immune
to my insanity
much as I'd like to infect you with it
you remain strong and true
I guess that's what I admire about you
the world could be crashing down
and you would ride on
cool as can be
with a wicked smile on your face
I wish to learn this trick
wisdom my savior
though I turn my head on this virtue
instead running into the fire
of the world as it is
consuming me it burns like acid
though I glory in the scars I've acquired
battle wounds I savor they remind me I'm alive
is maddening
crazy thing though
I love the pain of it
chewing glass
spitting blood onto the page
mixed with venom, pretty poison
you darlin are immune
to my insanity
much as I'd like to infect you with it
you remain strong and true
I guess that's what I admire about you
the world could be crashing down
and you would ride on
cool as can be
with a wicked smile on your face
I wish to learn this trick
wisdom my savior
though I turn my head on this virtue
instead running into the fire
of the world as it is
consuming me it burns like acid
though I glory in the scars I've acquired
battle wounds I savor they remind me I'm alive
Published 8th Jul 2014
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Anonymous
8th Jul 2014 6:35pm
I can relate to the sentiments here all too well and have known the type you describe in stanzas 4 and 5. This is flawless
peace, Miki
peace, Miki
8th Jul 2014 6:50pm
thank you lovely Miki for the gracious comment and for relating :) with love Crim
8th Jul 2014 6:42pm
It would be really ironic if you were writing this on your lunch break. Maybe you are a corporate vice president of a bank or some such profession.
That would give me hope ....
That would give me hope ....
8th Jul 2014 6:51pm
I wish I could say I had such a glamorous job sorry Sir Poet just a computer tech. thank you for the visit it's appreciated.. with respect Brenda
8th Jul 2014 6:52pm
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Anonymous
8th Jul 2014 6:54pm
Brenda,
I'm with Tommie Lynn on this one, love battle wounds. Glad you are alive!
tornado
I'm with Tommie Lynn on this one, love battle wounds. Glad you are alive!
tornado
8th Jul 2014 7:18pm
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9th Jul 2014 1:42am
lol Hash I love your take on my writes painful indeed :) thank you for the visit.. with love Crim
Anonymous
9th Jul 2014 1:16am
I needed this read tonight. Beautiful pain. Luv and hugs xo :)
9th Jul 2014 1:43am
beautiful Flower love you tender one thank you for being here :) with love Crim
9th Jul 2014 1:48am
the scars & the wounds form the armor of a survivor; you wear it well, Crim...
9th Jul 2014 2:10am
thank you kindly John you visits are deeply appreciated along with your words of wisdom :) with love Crim
9th Jul 2014 2:12am
Unveiling(crimsin) ~
This poem is remarkable: shattering in intensity, rife with vivid imagery, and vitriolic passion. Thank you for sharing your gift, luv. :-*
This poem is remarkable: shattering in intensity, rife with vivid imagery, and vitriolic passion. Thank you for sharing your gift, luv. :-*
10th Jul 2014 00:09am
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10th Jul 2014 4:02pm
Love this piece sweet Brenda!!!
Stanza 3 is my fave!!
I adore your ink sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
Stanza 3 is my fave!!
I adore your ink sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
16th Nov 2014 6:10pm
10th Jul 2014 10:33pm
I'm savoring your poetic tongue! Mine quivers to the delight of it. Amazing verses you have carved. xoxo The opening stanza really slices to the core. <Thanks for sharing>
16th Nov 2014 6:11pm
thank you beautiful Angel for such a gracious comment that touches my heart with love Crim
Anonymous
11th Jul 2014 4:38am
ah the battle wounds and scars, a constant reminder why we do the things we do, and why we love the way we do..Great job Brenda.
16th Nov 2014 6:12pm
12th Jul 2014 7:35am
...this made me say ouch, wow and I sighed... all at the same time. Amazing ink Crim! Xo
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28th Nov 2014 11:34pm
Ahh, Ms Brenda.
I've been away, returned to find you
writing and sharing again. :)
This word assembly, as always, is superb.
I like it a lot!
There could be no pleasure if we knew not pain.
..
Happy to see you're back!
Chad
I've been away, returned to find you
writing and sharing again. :)
This word assembly, as always, is superb.
I like it a lot!
There could be no pleasure if we knew not pain.
..
Happy to see you're back!
Chad
29th Nov 2014 4:12pm
thank you Chad for making me smile this morning seeing you back and for the gracious comment with love Brenda
23rd Dec 2014 10:08am
Unrequited love? (lust?) Worse, ignorance of your adoration or even existence?
Achingly well written, I am left with a sense deep melancholy after reading this.
Achingly well written, I am left with a sense deep melancholy after reading this.
23rd Dec 2014 9:05pm
I think it be a bad case of lust on my part thank you reading and leaving such a heartfelt comment with love and respect Crim
