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Control
I have no qualms
About who is in charge here yet
My pride wants to object
It raises a growl only for a minute
Then tucks its tail between my legs
My machismo wants to take me out back and
Beat me to a bloody pulp
He is more obstinate
I guess it’s my Latin blood
A fool walks a road filled with hardships and pains
His inflexibility, blindly leads him on
My eyes are open and
I have no qualms
Nor objections to post
Take my hand my love
And lead on
(C) 2014 XMAR82 ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
About who is in charge here yet
My pride wants to object
It raises a growl only for a minute
Then tucks its tail between my legs
My machismo wants to take me out back and
Beat me to a bloody pulp
He is more obstinate
I guess it’s my Latin blood
A fool walks a road filled with hardships and pains
His inflexibility, blindly leads him on
My eyes are open and
I have no qualms
Nor objections to post
Take my hand my love
And lead on
(C) 2014 XMAR82 ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
Published 7th Jul 2014
| Edited 3rd Feb 2017
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8th Jul 2014 00:28am
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8th Jul 2014 4:56am
Oh, X....another amazing job!!! So honored to call u a friend.
Xoxoxo
Belle
Xoxoxo
Belle
8th Jul 2014 9:15pm
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8th Jul 2014 7:51pm
This reads like poem but is more prose than anything. The line breaks get in the way of your flowing thoughts. I think you should seperate each thought into its own mini-stanza and write each stanza in more of an uninterrupted flow. It would free up the actual writing which i enjoy very much.
8th Jul 2014 9:22pm
Yes I struggled a bit and I'm trying new things but I will get better. Thanks for your thoughts Matt I will take them to heart. It's good to share ideas it will only make us better writers.
8th Jul 2014 7:52pm
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21st Jul 2014 5:37pm
I can not stop lauhing I am so amazed by how you write I love this. It is so real and it is so clear honest and beautiful♥
21st Jul 2014 5:59pm
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5th Aug 2014 9:02pm
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5th Aug 2014 10:42pm
Yes, bend like a reed in the wind grasshopper. If you fool yourself into thinking that you are in charge when you're in a relationship then you are a fool. Women are in charge.
