Goodbye

From the heart man.
It's always an experience reading your work.

anything to complain about here, truely put!

Its cool but I think it needed a little more...

I couldn't possibly affiliate the word 'cool' to this piece.

I would be interested for you to expand on 'it needed a little more'

But, sincerely, thankyou for your input

I don't usually like the absence of capitals at the beginning of lines (too many years of the same English teacher, I suppose) but here it's very effective - it cuts the lines up well and makes it almost jar, as does the repetition. And again usually for me, I'm finding the jarring is really good here. Well done!

of free verse!

..beautifully written, so perfectly put.