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Shiny Box of Dreams
PS3 machineShiny box of dreamsApocalyptic nightmare, scream A virtual reality meansTo please and brain freeze,To scare, to shock, to make you want to smash up the damn boxOf misery, obession, forgetting life's essenceTo escape, you don't need to complateI'll suck you in, never need to live againAutopilot, Lazyitess There will be no brightness,As you live life in blightednessLooking at a black sqaure box, powered by a black sqaure boxMoving only your thumbs, blinking only your eyesNever needing to move, go outside,Feel life's real highsI sigh,As I watch you, watch your life pass you by
Published 26th Mar 2011
| Edited 27th Mar 2011
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26th Mar 2011 9:28pm
Need to use spacing and spell check "Square" and "Obsession" and "Laziness." Do a few checks before posting though I do like the essence of the poem. I like the rhyming scheme and theme so well done. Thanks for the read, sorry if I sound tough.
26th Mar 2011 9:33pm
I know, for some reason it won't let me lay the poem out how I want - still trying :) thanks for the comment
