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So Very Over
I do not understand; you’re with someone new.. Leave me alone
You wanna contact, rekindle flame, via text on phone
I was a passing fancy; late night, cuddle call when feeling blue
You considered me, just a work out buddy for sex on cue
A friend to call when you needed something to enhance your mood
A lover who is adept at the between the sheets groove
Superficial care and concern about trivial things
Never more or on deeper level, just the brief thrill sex brings.
A release, stress reducer, warm body for comfort on lonely eve
You wanted one thing, at the end- the realization (I must admit did sting)
So take your sweet words and lying eyes and direct them at your “girlfriend”
Be a man, not a boy; your adolescent selfish ways should end.
You cannot (with me), have your cake and eat it too.
If you haven’t figured out, let me make it plain “I’m so.. very.. over.. you”
You wanna contact, rekindle flame, via text on phone
I was a passing fancy; late night, cuddle call when feeling blue
You considered me, just a work out buddy for sex on cue
A friend to call when you needed something to enhance your mood
A lover who is adept at the between the sheets groove
Superficial care and concern about trivial things
Never more or on deeper level, just the brief thrill sex brings.
A release, stress reducer, warm body for comfort on lonely eve
You wanted one thing, at the end- the realization (I must admit did sting)
So take your sweet words and lying eyes and direct them at your “girlfriend”
Be a man, not a boy; your adolescent selfish ways should end.
You cannot (with me), have your cake and eat it too.
If you haven’t figured out, let me make it plain “I’m so.. very.. over.. you”
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Re: So Very Over
29th Apr 2014 5:41pm
this reads with the finality you intended, lovely domore. can't have his cake and eat it too (insert other cliché's here). a powerful and empowering read.
p.s check "selfish" on L12.
p.s check "selfish" on L12.
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re: Re: So Very Over
29th Apr 2014 5:51pm
Thank you lovely miss m.. for the read and wonderful comment.. I treasure your words always.
ps--thank you for pointing out the goof.. lol.. I must remember that spell check is not a "fix all" :) with much respect to you.. xoxo domore
ps--thank you for pointing out the goof.. lol.. I must remember that spell check is not a "fix all" :) with much respect to you.. xoxo domore
Re: So Very Over
29th Apr 2014 6:12pm
Brimming with surety and self-confidence, Ms Domore. Good on ya. :)
Excellent! Bravo!
Excellent! Bravo!
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re: Re: So Very Over
Thank you Mister VP... I always appreciate your reading my work and glowing comments.. you make my heart happy with your words.. with respect..domore
Re: So Very Over
29th Apr 2014 7:40pm
Quite nice, packed with emotion in an artistic sort of way. Great job!
-Lissie
-Lissie
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re: Re: So Very Over
29th Apr 2014 7:43pm
Thank you atarliss (Lissie).. I appreciate the read and comment.. with much respect to you.. xoxo domore
Re: So Very Over
29th Apr 2014 11:42pm
re: Re: So Very Over
29th Apr 2014 11:48pm
Thank you Hash :) I am very glad you enjoyed.. with respect to you kind sir.. domore
Re: So Very Over
30th Apr 2014 00:40am
Love the stand you've taken with this guy you're a Goddess deserving so much more.. with love Crim :)
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re: Re: So Very Over
30th Apr 2014 3:03pm
Thank you kindly sweet Crim. I was a lil miffed to say the least when I wrote this.. LOL poetically long way to say he could go "eff himself" :) with love and respect..domore ;)
Re: So Very Over
30th Apr 2014 8:50am
re: Re: So Very Over
30th Apr 2014 3:04pm
Indeed! Lady P.... thank you for the read and comment :) you made me smile :) with respect..domore
Re: So Very Over
4th May 2014 7:13am
re: Re: So Very Over
4th May 2014 2:59pm
Thank you Unloveable :) You are too kind.. I am but a novice still in my journey of writing..so pleased you enjoy :) with respect..xoxo domore
Re: So Very Over
4th May 2014 4:56pm
When vision is restored from the flash it is plainly easy to see, we are all at one time or another a victim of this sort of vision.
What is deeply more depressing is that what you were getting from it was average as it sounded like you were the skilled partner.
Valid write of clarity Domore
What is deeply more depressing is that what you were getting from it was average as it sounded like you were the skilled partner.
Valid write of clarity Domore
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re: Re: So Very Over
5th May 2014 6:01am
Thank you Awakened, for the time to read and for the affirmation of vision you see within these lines.. with deepest respect..domore