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A Bitter Pill
I take my bitter medicine everyday
a pill I've become addicted to
with his razor sharp edges
leaving big ragged gashes
bleeding out I cauterize my heart
making it hard and steely
he skull fucks my head
causing my brain delirium
I revel in this state of mind
it makes me angry this bitter pill
though I feast off his mean nature
taking me out of myself
giving my mind a new perspective
hard hitting and rough
(author's note though vague this is about a hard hitting poet)
a pill I've become addicted to
with his razor sharp edges
leaving big ragged gashes
bleeding out I cauterize my heart
making it hard and steely
he skull fucks my head
causing my brain delirium
I revel in this state of mind
it makes me angry this bitter pill
though I feast off his mean nature
taking me out of myself
giving my mind a new perspective
hard hitting and rough
(author's note though vague this is about a hard hitting poet)
Published 27th Apr 2014
| Edited 28th Apr 2014
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27th Apr 2014 10:57pm
27th Apr 2014 11:02pm
27th Apr 2014 11:32pm
27th Apr 2014 11:39pm
Anonymous
27th Apr 2014 11:49pm
As always, you cut to the heart of the matter... nicely woven...
27th Apr 2014 11:56pm
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27th Apr 2014 11:49pm
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Anonymous
28th Apr 2014 00:06am
You always seem to find the right words when describing anything sinister and dark, Crim. Excellent work here. . .With Respect, Devlin.
28th Apr 2014 00:23am
Anonymous
28th Apr 2014 00:19am
It's hard hitting, yes. Well written naturally.
28th Apr 2014 00:24am
28th Apr 2014 00:34am
Lovely Brenda, well said. :) Brilliant, as always! XO
Sometimes the medicine tastes bad
But the directions say, 'Take it'
Though I often refuse :)
Sometimes the medicine tastes bad
But the directions say, 'Take it'
Though I often refuse :)
28th Apr 2014 00:50am
28th Apr 2014 1:34am
Lovely sentiment. I hope you course is veins like fire. As he does yours, sweet Crim ... nice write
28th Apr 2014 1:46am
28th Apr 2014 1:59am
What a powerful write Sweet Crim. You so rock my friend. It's like you write with the blood your tears drip. Luv it! Xo :)
28th Apr 2014 2:23am
28th Apr 2014 9:38am
poetry w/a punch, I like that neighborhood. if it roughs you up, slaps you around a little, it makes you feel alive...
28th Apr 2014 2:57pm
28th Apr 2014 11:41am
anything that's good for you is rarely palatable... a powerful and poignant write, lovely Brenda.
28th Apr 2014 2:59pm
thank you beautiful Kat.. all too true your comment this one burns my palate but I love his hard hitting nature :) with love Brenda
28th Apr 2014 12:47pm
28th Apr 2014 2:59pm
28th Apr 2014 2:22pm
Love the metaphor use in this write, Such a biter pill yet the taste is divine in the mind.
28th Apr 2014 3:01pm
28th Apr 2014 7:10pm
Beautifully done.. deep emotions filling every line.. kudos.. with love and respect.. xoxo domore
28th Apr 2014 8:48pm
28th Apr 2014 9:53pm
Ohhh that bitter pill leaves a bitter taste that reminds you of the pain.
"he skull fucks my head
causing my brain delirium"<--I so love those lines, Crim. Xo
"he skull fucks my head
causing my brain delirium"<--I so love those lines, Crim. Xo
28th Apr 2014 11:40pm
30th Apr 2014 1:02am
Good Gracious you are so seductive dear Crim.
I so vibe on your filth!!! I love every last line in this incredibly delicious depiction of all that is Crim
Love it !
Zazzles Xo
I so vibe on your filth!!! I love every last line in this incredibly delicious depiction of all that is Crim
Love it !
Zazzles Xo
30th Apr 2014 5:12pm
thank you most graciously Zazzles for making me smile wide this morning :) with love Crim
30th Apr 2014 6:14pm
30th Jun 2014 2:58am
The good side of benzos i guess...
at least they work...(in my case)
beautiful as always crim! (miss your ink) ;)
at least they work...(in my case)
beautiful as always crim! (miss your ink) ;)
2nd Jul 2014 1:20am
