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Your Presence
I lied
when I said it was just lust
in love with your presence
I shy away from the heat
you bring into the room
I convulse with pleasure
reading your life's adventures
imaging what it would be like
to be the lass in one of your stories
would you break my heart?
to late it's already broken
I've fallen hard
shaking like a child when you're near
my heart pounds, hands shake
wondering if you'll
read this and know it's you
that I'm speaking off
fantasizing like a little girl
lusting as only a woman can
wanting to ride you with abandon
have you crush me against you
taking my breath away
kiss me deeply
fucking me the way
only a man of your caliber can
when I said it was just lust
in love with your presence
I shy away from the heat
you bring into the room
I convulse with pleasure
reading your life's adventures
imaging what it would be like
to be the lass in one of your stories
would you break my heart?
to late it's already broken
I've fallen hard
shaking like a child when you're near
my heart pounds, hands shake
wondering if you'll
read this and know it's you
that I'm speaking off
fantasizing like a little girl
lusting as only a woman can
wanting to ride you with abandon
have you crush me against you
taking my breath away
kiss me deeply
fucking me the way
only a man of your caliber can
Published 27th Mar 2014
| Edited 8th Dec 2014
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27th Mar 2014 5:57am
Lovely Crim, intense ink. Love it!
There's nothing like a good crush. *dual meaning* :)
This lad is very familiar, in tune.
There's nothing like a good crush. *dual meaning* :)
This lad is very familiar, in tune.
27th Mar 2014 6:11am
Anonymous
27th Mar 2014 5:59am
Hell ya!!! Lust, luv, passion, sexy......got it all here in these great words that I'm sure HE will be honored by. Enjoyed this raw emotion very much. Xo :)
27th Mar 2014 6:12am
Anonymous
27th Mar 2014 6:11am
Oh Brenda, so much passion and dare i say 'lust', but i think its much deeper than that, there's huge amounts of respect to that person who's captured your imagination and heart. Beautiful write!
27th Mar 2014 6:17am
thank you beautiful Nikki yes I have lust but also a deep respect for this man :) with love Brenda
27th Mar 2014 6:19am
This is a beautiful and open
write Brenda.
You write passionately and
are pleasant to the imagination.
With respect and love... Pan
write Brenda.
You write passionately and
are pleasant to the imagination.
With respect and love... Pan
27th Mar 2014 6:27am
27th Mar 2014 6:21am
intense Crim.!! projecting from so deep dangerous but worth every word.!! nice
27th Mar 2014 6:28am
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27th Mar 2014 8:58am
Like an illness, only nothing the doctor can prescribe for it.
A passionately expressed piece dear. Great stuff. :)
A passionately expressed piece dear. Great stuff. :)
27th Mar 2014 4:26pm
27th Mar 2014 9:36am
some writers just have that ability to pull us go with grittiness of their words and the worlds they create. i love how you've expressed your emotions here Brenda, both poised and passionate xo
27th Mar 2014 4:27pm
yes sigh these poets they do pull us in thank you beautiful Mia :) with love Brenda
27th Mar 2014 9:59am
Deeply inspired by such powerful thoughts conveyed into words... hats off...head bow down
27th Mar 2014 4:28pm
Deep Unleashing of P...P...P...Passion.... stick a bunch of beautiful poets in a room and let their imaginations run wild [this place is ablaze with love and lust]. :)
Crim, you write from the heart, that's where true beauty shines.
Crim, you write from the heart, that's where true beauty shines.
27th Mar 2014 4:29pm
Yes Mr. Case I think your right ablaze with love and lust it is.. thank you for your visit :) with love Crim
27th Mar 2014 10:39am
there it is. once love moves in w/sex, you'll want to put fancy curtains on the windows, stuffed animals on the bed, there'll be no end to it...
27th Mar 2014 4:30pm
John I wouldn't go that far as i'll never have this man I desire but thank you for the great laugh :) with love Crim
Anonymous
27th Mar 2014 11:24am
Quite a recipe in this one, passion and danger mixed with mystery and amorality .. Penned with your flair for invoking emotion. A good read
Lovely work, Crim
Love and light ;-)
Lovely work, Crim
Love and light ;-)
27th Mar 2014 4:31pm
thank you lovely Miki for you great insight concerning this write.. with love Crim :)
Only the best writers can pull this off.
You are in a category by yourself.
Remember how I told you, you were the Queen of DUP. This proves it. You are # 1
This is about me, right ? Every man wants to be your man when they read this fine work.
You are in a category by yourself.
Remember how I told you, you were the Queen of DUP. This proves it. You are # 1
This is about me, right ? Every man wants to be your man when they read this fine work.
27th Mar 2014 4:33pm
you are far to kind maybe a princess lol and this poem is about many poets.. Sir Poet with love Crim :)
Kissing these words deeply. No need to shy away from this fire, the heat feels good as it penetrates. much love it :)
27th Mar 2014 4:34pm
thank you beautiful Angel I feel your heat and passion and I love it :) with love Crim
Tis a love letter, A letter that many read and enter thy own name in the blank. So alluring, such conviction, One can only hope the intended eyes recognize. As a reader you gave us no choice but to love this.
27th Mar 2014 4:35pm
thank you dear Soul many poets and poetess can place their name there as I love many here.. with love Crim
27th Mar 2014 9:42pm
Beautiful Love piece Sweet Brenda!!!!
Where do I get my number in line? LOL!!
Love the read!!!
Sir Lancelott
Where do I get my number in line? LOL!!
Love the read!!!
Sir Lancelott
27th Mar 2014 10:06pm
27th Mar 2014 10:04pm
Oh Crim, I just love this! You always have such a fragile pen that spills with power and that is so amazing to me. Your poetic-presence is simply divine to inhale. :)
27th Mar 2014 10:08pm
beautiful Rain thank you for such a heart touching comment.. in love with your beautiful pen and the soul that spills it's ink :) with love Crim
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30th Mar 2014 6:05am
i like me some pavlov and watts. i enjoy crowley and sagan, but You my dear make me feel wierd.
30th Mar 2014 7:36am
