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If he could run, and leap away from the earth...
He doesn't spill psalms
about her from the cavity much
nowadays
All the flutterings of butterflies
fell, sans gravity...in silent dismay
There's no more magic, dancing
amongst the cotton candied clouds
yet, the aches for her comfort plays...
Like an old, sad, love song
on the turntables of yesterday
he still frequents microcosms
of what joy appeared to be
when she warmed him with
her all consuming ray...
about her from the cavity much
nowadays
All the flutterings of butterflies
fell, sans gravity...in silent dismay
There's no more magic, dancing
amongst the cotton candied clouds
yet, the aches for her comfort plays...
Like an old, sad, love song
on the turntables of yesterday
he still frequents microcosms
of what joy appeared to be
when she warmed him with
her all consuming ray...
Published 24th Mar 2014
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24th Mar 2014 1:56pm
Nicely done Poeticmind...I particularly like these lines:
Like an old, sad, love song
on the turntables of yesterday
/EngrVV
Like an old, sad, love song
on the turntables of yesterday
/EngrVV
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24th Mar 2014 3:05pm
:) really liking this poem great title also,
every word is perfect in this piece!
every word is perfect in this piece!
24th Mar 2014 3:13pm
Sweet dear Nikki, you most definitely have moved my heart to a beat! :) thank you so much sweetheart :)
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24th Mar 2014 4:08pm
far too many beautiful lines to quote, Poe. this poignant visual flows seamlessly and with an artistry unique to you. bravo Papi.
24th Mar 2014 5:10pm
Aaaaawwww mami, just you saying anything is beautiful to me!
Thank you my sweet Mia, grateful as always I am for your sweet support :)
Thank you my sweet Mia, grateful as always I am for your sweet support :)
24th Mar 2014 5:13pm
"he still frequents microcosms
of what joy appeared to be"
^^^^^that right thurr...was witty! :)
I love when your pen drips soft emotions. Lovely write, Poe! Xo
of what joy appeared to be"
^^^^^that right thurr...was witty! :)
I love when your pen drips soft emotions. Lovely write, Poe! Xo
24th Mar 2014 5:21pm
My sweet precious Rain, I love knowing your
in my corner..,always n forever I thank you! :)
in my corner..,always n forever I thank you! :)
24th Mar 2014 5:55pm
the gentle pain of someone irreplaceable - well written - much liked cool writings
particularly:
"the aches for her comfort plays"
particularly:
"the aches for her comfort plays"
24th Mar 2014 11:32pm
Thank you, greatly appreciate your thoughts n visit
I will return the favor soon :)
I will return the favor soon :)
24th Mar 2014 9:52pm
love the straight forwardness of this write. You're simply talented, Poe :) I enjoyed reading this one very much*
24th Mar 2014 11:36pm
My sweet angel you make me blush
Sooooo much! :) thank you sweetie pie
I'm grateful always for ur support :)
Sooooo much! :) thank you sweetie pie
I'm grateful always for ur support :)
25th Mar 2014 8:39pm
How your ink always presses upon emotions thru out. This one is so visual. Brilliant! :)
25th Mar 2014 8:57pm
Yea I guess you can say I'm a bit emotional lol
Seriously though, I thank you much my friend n I'm always n forever grateful for your support :)
Seriously though, I thank you much my friend n I'm always n forever grateful for your support :)
26th Mar 2014 9:26pm
oh wow this was so tender and touching..and simply Beautiful..Well Done Poetik!!!
