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Cold lies
With my heart of lies,
Darkness fills my mind,
Their words are so cold,
They tear my love away,
Now there's only pain...
Darkness fills my mind,
Their words are so cold,
They tear my love away,
Now there's only pain...
Published 11th Mar 2014
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14th Mar 2014 10:00pm
I feel this has great potential it is dark and shows love in a twisted light which I totally love. However it should be longer to express your ideas this seems to be your biggest problem so far but overall its a great read.
18th Feb 2017 11:13pm
The length of the poem is of little concern to me. Its the emotion and meaning behind it that would matter most to the readers. I write to make anything I can stir in someone's heart no matter how dark or broken it is. What matters to me is how the words make someone feel.
