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Humpty Dumpty
If you check all my parts
you'll say some are missing
or broken.
You'll say it's sad
just not right,
maybe you'll go looking
here and there,
trying to find the missing parts
or fix the broken ones.
But truly there is only
one part missing
and that part is you,
so fix me please
let me be whole again.
you'll say some are missing
or broken.
You'll say it's sad
just not right,
maybe you'll go looking
here and there,
trying to find the missing parts
or fix the broken ones.
But truly there is only
one part missing
and that part is you,
so fix me please
let me be whole again.
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Re: Humpty Dumpty
9th Feb 2014 4:33pm
Dude, this is super sad... But an inventive twist on that
time tested fable... Outstanding!
time tested fable... Outstanding!
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9th Feb 2014 6:14pm
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Oh very nice.
I did stumble just a bit, because one cannot "check all your parts" if any are missing. They could "check for (all)" your parts or "check on (all)" your parts. Probably just me.
But the twist at the end was just outstanding! And sad and touching. Well done.
I did stumble just a bit, because one cannot "check all your parts" if any are missing. They could "check for (all)" your parts or "check on (all)" your parts. Probably just me.
But the twist at the end was just outstanding! And sad and touching. Well done.
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Re: Humpty Dumpty
11th Feb 2014 8:13am
mister hash, you're not broken, just temporarily out of order and awaiting spare parts.
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11th Feb 2014 7:43pm
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11th Feb 2014 11:55am
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