fake smile

Hay ur an amazing artist I love ur poetry

thanks man makes me feel all awesome inside :) :):)

It started off a little bland, in my opinion. "You left me blahblah, I don't want to see you happy, blahblah, but you're happy anyway, blahblah" An overused topic that has now turned into a bit of a cliche.

"I smile back
a fake smile
I felt plastic
fake"

In my advice, I would take the last "Fake" out of there; a bit repetitive.

And the last part is a bit awkward, as well.
"Is that all it was
from you to me
from me to you
a fake smile"

Perhaps...
"Is that all that's left
of you and me;
a fake smile?"

It's a little odd to read without punctuation as well. Might make it a little neater. Just a suggestion, of course. You can always "Edit" it by clicking in the top right corner.

:]

ok thank

a little repetitive but good.

thanks appriacte it(i think thats how u spell it :/)

I loved this poem it was amazing though I do agree it was a bit repetitive I loved it!

thank u

Ouch. Totally been there, hon. Over and over and over again. Wish I could offer some advice. Liked the poem, though.