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Et sepelierunt ossa
Your breath is sharper than the snap
back of a whip, grasping in vain
for the bridle of your wild pulse.
Bare branches loom, eclipsing
moon-drenched clouds
be still, the dire wolves howl.
Steel begets steel and true
swords may stay a man These
beasts draw nearer for blood.
Your brother has fallen, neck
wrenched no small victory
for the malefic trees, that reached
and slammed him from the saddle.
His horse rears, its reins snagged,
in their second stake for a life.
A timely leap delivers you the seat
the blade slashes the leather free,
all hope entrusted to a fistful of mane.
Your howls replace fading echoes,
in unholy, wordless vows.
et sepelierunt ossa
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Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
24th Jan 2014 11:13pm
Give me second, I'm just getting back from this haunting episode you've written. When I was reading this I was anxious and uncomfortable;read it a couple of times. Mystery to me who made the escape with your cryptic style and the Latin. Your poem has me hanging in suspense, almost buried.
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re: Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
26th Jan 2014 11:56am
Well, the action was quick, blink and you miss it.
;)
'buried' is pretty close to the Latin used here - I had to look up a few things before I got the phrasing just right.
Et sepelierunt ossa - will bury the bones...
;)
'buried' is pretty close to the Latin used here - I had to look up a few things before I got the phrasing just right.
Et sepelierunt ossa - will bury the bones...
Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Jan 2014 7:12am
25th Jan 2014 7:10am
Roll the bones...tarde venientibus ossa
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26th Jan 2014 11:56am
Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
25th Jan 2014 11:08am
I love the pacing of this piece. It all runs together so well, never stumbling. An dark adrenalin rush of an experience.
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
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re: Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
26th Jan 2014 11:57am
It flickered in my head like a movie, and I just grabbed some words. Glad it gave you a rush, Indie, it did me too! Thank you.
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25th Jan 2014 3:30pm
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26th Jan 2014 11:58am
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25th Jan 2014 3:53pm
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26th Jan 2014 11:58am
Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
26th Jan 2014 4:13am
Grasping in vain for the bridle of your wild pulse
Jheeze... Where's the button that makes the internet stand up and applaud? I'll let you know when I find it. Darth Vader would be proud :)
Jheeze... Where's the button that makes the internet stand up and applaud? I'll let you know when I find it. Darth Vader would be proud :)
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re: Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
26th Jan 2014 12:00pm
Darth Vader reads poetry? What Jedi mind trick is this?..
Thank you so much for the standing online ovation, Dys, and the list add, so very kind of you!
Thank you so much for the standing online ovation, Dys, and the list add, so very kind of you!
Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
26th Jan 2014 11:43am
it is so hard to judge the internal state by the external act - this is a truly intriguing poem brilliantly set in a universe created and whole - exiting and rousing to!
Yep lots to like
Yep lots to like
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re: Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
26th Jan 2014 12:02pm
I have avoided the 'telling' and stuck to the showing - perhaps some telling would be in order in prose... coming soon!
Thank you for stopping by, Whale.
Thank you for stopping by, Whale.
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26th Jan 2014 11:55am
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26th Jan 2014 12:03pm
Adventure is what we call it when we are safe back home... Thank you, Feddeler.
Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
26th Jan 2014 7:19pm
"Quorum Praeda Uictoris!"
(and...)
To the fallen hero, pay tribute---while. sadly, his courage 'will be buried with his bones'....
I could 'see' the intensity of the battle as it played out in your lines! A compelling piece, my Friend!
(and...)
To the fallen hero, pay tribute---while. sadly, his courage 'will be buried with his bones'....
I could 'see' the intensity of the battle as it played out in your lines! A compelling piece, my Friend!
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re: Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
29th Jan 2014 6:34am
Dark Enchantress, your laser beam vision burn holes in my brain, love it!
Thank you so much for your brilliant comments.
Thank you so much for your brilliant comments.
Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
1st Feb 2014 4:42pm
immense worlds emerge in the density of enigmatic verse, been reading this one for days, get lost in tangential reveries every time in your breath like whip snap, galloping hoove pulse beats, sun melted sliver dripping on clouds, a knife blade cutting the reins of control, "all hope entrusted to a fistful of mane" - the best poems for me, like this, are the ones i have nothing to say but a mirror full of praise
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re: Re: Et sepelierunt ossa
1st Feb 2014 11:40pm
Well, there's my smile for today. Thank you, Sem, for giving this write your attention. It is much appreciated.
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20th Feb 2014 3:33pm