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Never expected: a Dear John Letter...
It
was
in a letter
he kept beside
the bed...
and for the
thousandth time
he read her
words...
in his head
tears blurred
crimson smeared ink
'pon worn pages
for ages it seems
she had gone
just lovin' him
so long...
he struggled
but managed
to read on
chapt.3
the letter states
day wasn't going great
each had, too much
on their plates...
it appears love turned
on a dime
to hate
now his heart's
beating at a high rate...
Perspiration's
producing
angst and
severely pounding
palpitations
the final act
a prelude
that alludes
to premonition's
fate...
was
in a letter
he kept beside
the bed...
and for the
thousandth time
he read her
words...
in his head
tears blurred
crimson smeared ink
'pon worn pages
for ages it seems
she had gone
just lovin' him
so long...
he struggled
but managed
to read on
chapt.3
the letter states
day wasn't going great
each had, too much
on their plates...
it appears love turned
on a dime
to hate
now his heart's
beating at a high rate...
Perspiration's
producing
angst and
severely pounding
palpitations
the final act
a prelude
that alludes
to premonition's
fate...
Published 12th Jan 2014
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12th Jan 2014 11:54pm
I can see him clutching the worn pages as he presses them to his chest. Heart needling, to say the least. Well, written* :)
13th Jan 2014 2:14am
Yea, I can truly say it def. Stabbed at the heart... Appreciate you my sweetness :)
13th Jan 2014 00:56am
13th Jan 2014 2:15am
Anonymous
13th Jan 2014 1:11am
This is soooooo sad. Felt the emotion swing thru while I was reading. Well done. :)
13th Jan 2014 2:28am
Anonymous
13th Jan 2014 2:21am
This is sad and heartfelt and so beautifully scribed, you totally drew the reader in with this one PIKM.
13th Jan 2014 4:30am
Thank you my sweet lady, I know it was sad
but something's aren't meant for smiles true? :)
Appreciate you tons :)
but something's aren't meant for smiles true? :)
Appreciate you tons :)
13th Jan 2014 4:03am
...he should have burned the letter the moment he read it. A keepsake of pain continues to breathe. Love the emotions pouring from your pen. Last stanza spoke volumes...Xo
13th Jan 2014 4:40am
You are soooo right my sweet Rain! He truly should've gotten rid if that damn paper lol... Thank you so much my dear!
Grateful to you always :)
Grateful to you always :)
13th Jan 2014 4:06am
What brought about such a sad reading of things....,
Might there be another interpretation viewed from another angle ........?
Forgive me I just can't help looking for a bright side more often than not...... <3
Might there be another interpretation viewed from another angle ........?
Forgive me I just can't help looking for a bright side more often than not...... <3
13th Jan 2014 4:50am
Nothing based on reality my sweetness! So don't worry ok?
My mind is just always drifting into ideas good n bad n this one was just a dark one! thank you for the concern n support, I appreciate it always :)
My mind is just always drifting into ideas good n bad n this one was just a dark one! thank you for the concern n support, I appreciate it always :)
13th Jan 2014 7:07am
it's only you who writes erotic to get the ladies all hot and bothered then switches it up to lay this heart wrenching piece on us.... everything you write evokes such keen emotions and this was no different.
13th Jan 2014 1:13pm
Dear sweet Mia, only you can make me feel like I won the lottery with your commentary when it's clear
your ink hits with so much power in every tone
in which you speak that I can only hope to come close! :)
Appreciate you much Mami! :)
your ink hits with so much power in every tone
in which you speak that I can only hope to come close! :)
Appreciate you much Mami! :)
13th Jan 2014 8:22am
13th Jan 2014 1:19pm
Well I hope you know I hold the highest regard for your talent my dear n so your approval of my ink only encourages me to try to continue to keep your attention n poetic respect! :) thank you so much :)
13th Jan 2014 6:09pm
13th Jan 2014 6:47pm
Yea that poor dude lol
Hey at least he got a letter! Could've been worse
No word, no nothing just left wondering true?
Thanks bro!
Hey at least he got a letter! Could've been worse
No word, no nothing just left wondering true?
Thanks bro!
14th Jan 2014 11:42pm
15th Jan 2014 00:16am
Expensive indeed my sweetness... I thank you truly
for your thoughts n support :)
for your thoughts n support :)
15th Jan 2014 7:41pm
"for ages it seems
she had gone
just lovin' him
so long...
he struggled
but managed
to read on " so felt the angst here!
she had gone
just lovin' him
so long...
he struggled
but managed
to read on " so felt the angst here!
15th Jan 2014 8:56pm
19th Jan 2014 4:42pm
you paint vivid pictures and transport me there in the moment....as always your fan!
19th Jan 2014 7:39pm
N such a wonderful n supportive fan you are... I'm truly
N deeply grateful :)
N deeply grateful :)
19th Jan 2014 11:44pm
20th Jan 2014 00:35am
27th Apr 2014 6:01am
Poe,
I enjoyed this a lot. And it's true a letter seems more cruel because we can always read the pain again and again :(
Nicely said my friend
Zazzles
I enjoyed this a lot. And it's true a letter seems more cruel because we can always read the pain again and again :(
Nicely said my friend
Zazzles
27th Apr 2014 4:58pm
Hi stranger :) yea that's very true
Although me, I'd throw that damn thing away
after the first read! lol thank u my dear, you've been missed :)
Although me, I'd throw that damn thing away
after the first read! lol thank u my dear, you've been missed :)
