Haiku 5-7-5 (2013-12-23)

More and more, I like this form to write. But I have to go back to classical form! Thank you Gabriel for your support!

Hi, hon... lovely poem... and this one is a Haiku... lol...

One change, perhaps... First line should be "Dark"  storms... a dirk is a kind of dagger...

Thank you, Dee, for your nice comment. Just "Dirk" is the name of the storm, perhaps I have to write "Storm Dirk" instead of "Dirk storm"?

Ooooh!!!! well, that clears it up...

then this is just right... =)

"Dark Dirk storm" should be interesting too, but not suit for haïku!

Thanks for the clarification on Dirk, malin. Yes, Storm Dirk might work better ..

Your second line is 8 beats however ... Perhaps you could frame it as a question given the passing storm (Dirk) ...

Will Christmas night be quiet

Overall, I like this - the piece asks can the violence of a storm be quieted on a holy night to spare the silent and tender.

LSP

Thank you so much for your comments, very helpful for me, LSP! And thank you for the time spent to read my haiku!