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A Little of You
A little of you
goes a long way
to make me feel
ok.
When I hold you tight,
no air between us.
I feel you all over me,
like blue in the summer sky.
When I smell your beauty,
I'm so full of life.
So many dreams exploding,
dancing in my head.
Sliding your hand into mine,
squeezing it so soft and gentle.
Sending rivers of joy
and waterfalls of peace.
I look into your eyes,
blinking once or twice.
Spinning and twisting,
like Dorothy in the Land of Oz.
Just to be near you,
a little of you
goes a long way
to make me feel
ok.
goes a long way
to make me feel
ok.
When I hold you tight,
no air between us.
I feel you all over me,
like blue in the summer sky.
When I smell your beauty,
I'm so full of life.
So many dreams exploding,
dancing in my head.
Sliding your hand into mine,
squeezing it so soft and gentle.
Sending rivers of joy
and waterfalls of peace.
I look into your eyes,
blinking once or twice.
Spinning and twisting,
like Dorothy in the Land of Oz.
Just to be near you,
a little of you
goes a long way
to make me feel
ok.
Published 13th Dec 2013
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Just ok....??? WOW--the creatively , sweetly lovely way in which you describe this special lady, the reader cannot help but think that she makes you feel amazing!! (LOL!)
..."When I hold you tight,
no air between us.
I feel you all over me,
like blue in the summer sky...." such delicate, beautiful lines!
My Friend,reading this piece 'goes a long way' to make feel all cozy, inside, on a cold , dark night. Thank you for the smiles, and warm fuzzies! x
..."When I hold you tight,
no air between us.
I feel you all over me,
like blue in the summer sky...." such delicate, beautiful lines!
My Friend,reading this piece 'goes a long way' to make feel all cozy, inside, on a cold , dark night. Thank you for the smiles, and warm fuzzies! x
14th Dec 2013 10:45pm
Anonymous
13th Dec 2013 3:22am
This is how it should be ... great poem, simply and warmly expressed.
14th Dec 2013 10:46pm
13th Dec 2013 4:31am
love everything about this, especially the wonderfully understated affection!
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13th Dec 2013 5:07pm
Hashman - Often it's those smells, the holding, the squeezing and that look in the eye which will transport you to OZ where you gladly click your heels 3 times while saying "I wanna stay here. I don't wanna go home. I wanna stay here. I don't wanna go home". Enjoyed it Hashman and the memories it brought back. Namyh
14th Dec 2013 10:52pm
Anonymous
14th Dec 2013 2:39am
Bro this is like a soft warm breeze of cozy and devoted love blowing across two lovers as they lie together on the picnic blanket by the riverside...Sweet and honest emotions coloring this piece ..perfectly penned Hash
14th Dec 2013 10:54pm
15th Dec 2013 12:22pm
You're poem blew me away and carried me to a soft place where I could rest.
15th Dec 2013 1:07pm
25th Dec 2013 9:40pm
My favorite lines althogh there are many more:
Sliding your hand into mine,
squeezing it so soft and gentle.
Sending rivers of joy
and waterfalls of peace.
That's so tender and peaceful. Just beautiful.
Sliding your hand into mine,
squeezing it so soft and gentle.
Sending rivers of joy
and waterfalls of peace.
That's so tender and peaceful. Just beautiful.
26th Dec 2013 1:12am
26th Dec 2013 9:43pm
Just ok? Mea culpa, I'm sorry! You're worth the effort to make you SMILE and feel great!
26th Dec 2013 10:22pm
Miss Chi,you always make me feel fantastic...just like my words say,a little of you goes a long way to make me feel ok (in other words...fantastic) always peace and love to you :)
26th Dec 2013 10:33pm
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