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on your knees again...
There in the crack
on the floor.
It's a crumb
or a rock.
let me get on my knees
and crawl around.
Feel with my hands,
for those tiny stones.
Found one...I think
let me look closer,
don't know,could be.
It's white,it's hard.
Looks good to me,
let's fire it up
cough,cough,cough.
Damm...blueberry muffin again.
on the floor.
It's a crumb
or a rock.
let me get on my knees
and crawl around.
Feel with my hands,
for those tiny stones.
Found one...I think
let me look closer,
don't know,could be.
It's white,it's hard.
Looks good to me,
let's fire it up
cough,cough,cough.
Damm...blueberry muffin again.
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Re: on your knees again...
15th Dec 2013 3:52pm
My friend,
To me,this piece is a (wry), sad depiction of the tragic desperation, that is so often associated with addiction.
A powerfully, truthful message within these lines!
Inked with Insight!
To me,this piece is a (wry), sad depiction of the tragic desperation, that is so often associated with addiction.
A powerfully, truthful message within these lines!
Inked with Insight!
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re: Re: on your knees again...
15th Dec 2013 4:12pm
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15th Dec 2013 4:28pm
A recovering addict once told me they would call this "carpet surfing"....Addiction is such a lonely place.Awesome write Hman.
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15th Dec 2013 4:45pm
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Anonymous
15th Dec 2013 11:07pm
This is a new side of you ... great stuff, well written...
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15th Dec 2013 11:44pm
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16th Dec 2013 00:25am
Been there...kind of. Finding pieces of paper hoping there's a little something in them still. Very deep, very well written and completely understood. Thanks for this great poem.
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16th Dec 2013 00:49am
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16th Dec 2013 10:42pm
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16th Dec 2013 10:59pm
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21st Dec 2013 4:24am
been there man...I'm a retired carpet farmer/key hole gangster myself. I don't miss those days
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re: Re: on your knees again...
21st Dec 2013 9:36am
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23rd Dec 2013 12:03pm
And you can find yourself quite a bit lower than the floor. Takes me back. Gratefully, way back. Thanks for the share Mr H.
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23rd Dec 2013 3:09pm
So true Mr.Sway...Thank God it's way back and we're looking forward now (peace)
Re: on your knees again...
Good to have read the previous comments before.
Can't relate to the topic but as clear as day
it's an awesome write, Hashman.
Can't relate to the topic but as clear as day
it's an awesome write, Hashman.
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26th Dec 2013 1:22am
Miss Chi I find it amazing that there are so many different situations in life,so many people,so many different things happening.every freaking day ,here there,everywhere...it's just crazy.(Thank you always)