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Oh Nikki the pain here is excruciating. A great write and so poignant.

SO Poweerful Nikkie....
Your words have so much powerful and purpose....


You need to record your work
travel let your voice ring loud N clear...


Im sure .. the spoken word world...
has yet to feel ur kind of power...


Love this Nikkie!
XOXO
Fire

I'm really intrigued by the title, wanted to know the story behind why you selected it! This piece hits home to many I'm sure, because it's very relatable! Beautiful emotional spill, Nikki.....Xo

Reminds me of a battle between the head and heart, the mind demands separation and the heart yearns for touch!  Powerful!  Mike

Yeah  Love will do that

So, if you're gonna throw the word "you" around with the reader kept in the dark as to who the "you" is, you've already lost the reader — you've cut them out. You write something personal or impersonal. No halves. You could use a name instead of "you", or you could just say "him". I like this poem because of its focus and simplicity. You could take some of the lines out as they repeat other lines, just with different phrasing.

This probably isn't too important to you, but the way a poem's punctuated reflects how it's read. There are pauses missing in the lines where you'd pause when speaking. The tone and emotion is real, so should the way it's spoken be. Just thought, Miss Nikki.

Thanks, your kinda right, but I like writing to "you" because instead of cutting the reader out, I want them to feel the anger or whatever other feeling I'm trying to get across, so if they have any bit of imagination then they can act it out to feel the trueness of the piece....your dead on about my punctuation :) thank you Mr. A

You know once your poem is to be viewed it's no longer yours? Meaning, regardless of your intentions, the reader is always right. ;)

you taught me trust is just a five letter word


As easily spoken as broken.