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What i'm gonna do
I知 going to smile and make you think I知 happy, I知 going to laugh, so you don稚 see me cry, I知 going to let you go in style, and even if it kills me - I知 going to smile.
Some people say the worst way to miss someone is when they are right next to you and you know you can't have them, but it's worse when you thought you didn't want them anymore and then all of a sudden you realize you can't live without them.
It hurts the most when you can actually feel your heart breaking.
It's amazing how someone can break your heart, but you still love them with all the little pieces.
I was born when you kissed me. I died when you left me. I lived a few weeks while you loved me.
Love starts with a smile, Grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.
What do you do when the only one that can make you stop crying, is the person who made you cry?
You're not worth the tears, you're not worth the heartache. I don't know why I give you the time. You're not worth the pain, you're not worth the emptiness. I don't know why I wish you were mine.
Some people say the worst way to miss someone is when they are right next to you and you know you can't have them, but it's worse when you thought you didn't want them anymore and then all of a sudden you realize you can't live without them.
It hurts the most when you can actually feel your heart breaking.
It's amazing how someone can break your heart, but you still love them with all the little pieces.
I was born when you kissed me. I died when you left me. I lived a few weeks while you loved me.
Love starts with a smile, Grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.
What do you do when the only one that can make you stop crying, is the person who made you cry?
You're not worth the tears, you're not worth the heartache. I don't know why I give you the time. You're not worth the pain, you're not worth the emptiness. I don't know why I wish you were mine.
Published 17th Nov 2013
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17th Nov 2013 7:43am
Beautifully poignant with some refreshing lines. I particularly appreciated (Love starts with a smile, Grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear. ) Wonderful!! Oh and closely flowed by (was born when you kissed me. I died when you left me. I lived a few weeks while you loved me. )
There is to me one minor flaw ( too many) you your you're and I's. maybe it's just me but I found them distracting. I think this would be so much stronger if some of them could be worked around and alternatives found. Maybe it's the outpouring of pain that is why it is so ( which is excusable) I do hope you don't mind my honesty Other than that this is a really good piece.
Plz note this is just my reaction to this piece and I'm not always right. Syn
There is to me one minor flaw ( too many) you your you're and I's. maybe it's just me but I found them distracting. I think this would be so much stronger if some of them could be worked around and alternatives found. Maybe it's the outpouring of pain that is why it is so ( which is excusable) I do hope you don't mind my honesty Other than that this is a really good piece.
Plz note this is just my reaction to this piece and I'm not always right. Syn
17th Nov 2013 7:45am
18th Nov 2013 3:32am
17th Nov 2013 10:30am
This is beautifully written and it's a poem that people can relate to :) Well done :)
18th Nov 2013 3:33am
17th Nov 2013 8:05pm
Loved the same lines .......st did. They could have been a poem themselves!
18th Nov 2013 3:33am
