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Baby, it's cold outside
Coals
deepened red
toast to time
this chilling hour
where watched clocks
freeze
as I scrape out powder
emptying ash
made in preparation
for cold hearted winter
Howling winds
scrape long nails
of trees barren.
The leaf of all gone
where insignificant
man
twiddles thumbs
balancing twigs
in tepee pyre
long hibernations, cries and coats
Coarse decoration
is in order
scratching at minds
huddled in corner
a long sigh
a drink of mimosa
then deep sleep, blankets and pillow
there décor paused upon holiday
adorns, painted flowers, douglas fir
Yule see logs sawed blazing heat
deepened red
toast to time
this chilling hour
where watched clocks
freeze
as I scrape out powder
emptying ash
made in preparation
for cold hearted winter
Howling winds
scrape long nails
of trees barren.
The leaf of all gone
where insignificant
man
twiddles thumbs
balancing twigs
in tepee pyre
long hibernations, cries and coats
Coarse decoration
is in order
scratching at minds
huddled in corner
a long sigh
a drink of mimosa
then deep sleep, blankets and pillow
there décor paused upon holiday
adorns, painted flowers, douglas fir
Yule see logs sawed blazing heat
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Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 1:43am
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28th Oct 2013 2:10am
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 2:54am
Now that's cold baby... Beautiful scenery painted in frosty words. Love this so much, but truly hate the cold... :)
Pen Chills~Xo
Pen Chills~Xo
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 3:28am
hehehe indeed I detest it much....if its cold...it needs to snow...and after the first two or three i'm done with it :)
Thank You Dear Rain!!!
Thank You Dear Rain!!!
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28th Oct 2013 3:02am
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28th Oct 2013 3:30am
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Anonymous
28th Oct 2013 4:00am
Sometimes I long for a good snowfall. Here it's just months and months of grey and rain...
But yeah ... I hear you.
But yeah ... I hear you.

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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 3:08pm
Hehehe indeed i understand that...i love the first few...then the novelty wears off-Thanks for reading me Dear Petit!!!
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 4:41am
I would love a chance too play in the snow!
Awesome piece Bro. Soul!!!
Sir Lancelott
Awesome piece Bro. Soul!!!
Sir Lancelott
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 3:09pm
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Anonymous
28th Oct 2013 12:06pm
Great imagery
Having grown up in this
you portray this just so well
well written
enjoyed
Kitty
Having grown up in this
you portray this just so well
well written
enjoyed
Kitty

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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 3:10pm
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Anonymous
28th Oct 2013 2:11pm
Greatly painted with words...
However much you do not like the cold, you always connect with natures ways, Soul....
Truely enjoyed this poem!
However much you do not like the cold, you always connect with natures ways, Soul....
Truely enjoyed this poem!

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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 3:11pm
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 3:43pm
First, I love that song.
I agree with everyone. This was a lovely poem, the imagery wonderful. I'm with you a few pretty snowy days is more than enough.
I agree with everyone. This was a lovely poem, the imagery wonderful. I'm with you a few pretty snowy days is more than enough.
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 5:43pm
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28th Oct 2013 4:39pm
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28th Oct 2013 5:44pm
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Anonymous
28th Oct 2013 6:23pm
I wishs someone would read this to me as I fall asleep from eggnog. Wonderful, purely great writing. : )

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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
28th Oct 2013 9:09pm
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
29th Oct 2013 00:14am
Soul ,
You just get better with each ink you post.
Keep it up.
Take Care
KG
You just get better with each ink you post.
Keep it up.
Take Care
KG
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
30th Oct 2013 5:44pm
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30th Oct 2013 7:33pm
Soul,
My friend, KG or Charlie will do
Not been called sir, since my military days. Been non active for a while.
Take care
KG
My friend, KG or Charlie will do
Not been called sir, since my military days. Been non active for a while.
Take care
KG
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Re: Baby, it's cold outside
29th Oct 2013 2:30am
I'm not a winter person, but I rather enjoy a good snow. Long walks in the cold air is good for the lungs. Haven't seen a really good one in some time. Wish I could get away with hibernating. It's a time for twiddling thumbs & a special kind of madness. & Spring arrives like an explosion. I love the dark elegance of this piece. That's a great shot, too. Great atmosphere, Soul.
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
29th Oct 2013 1:14pm
i found that pic searchin' man i dig it!!!
indeed...perfect snows...no wind...yeah man memories and the muffled quietness -i can lose myself in it-Appreciate You Butcher!!!
indeed...perfect snows...no wind...yeah man memories and the muffled quietness -i can lose myself in it-Appreciate You Butcher!!!
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
29th Oct 2013 5:22am
A real pleasure this. Such a cozy time of year. Great time to break out the cognac and watch a nice hockey game.
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
29th Oct 2013 1:15pm
Second that M. -Go Rangers (well...back in the day ;)
Thank You for the kind words!!!
Thank You for the kind words!!!
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
31st Oct 2013 2:33am
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31st Oct 2013 3:14am
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
31st Oct 2013 11:27pm
Your words chill me...cold will be here soon,gotta go buy a new pair of boots.(sweet pic)
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
31st Oct 2013 11:33pm
Thanks Hash :)
Man I was happy to find that pic!!!
(I'm behind on reviews Sir apologies...time is my nemesis of late)
Man I was happy to find that pic!!!
(I'm behind on reviews Sir apologies...time is my nemesis of late)
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
This goes well with the song of the same name. I love your ability to describe the grandeur and majesty of the seasons and how humans relate to them.
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
5th Nov 2013 2:18am
once in awhile I claim myself as one...I do love that song despite all the fame it got...they almost ruined it for me-Thanks Jazz!!!
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5th Nov 2013 3:09am
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Re: Baby, it's cold outside
6th Nov 2013 3:38am
It's a credit to your talent, Soulman, that your terrific pictures you paint here almost get me excited for winter. Alas, the icy roads and back breaking snow have left me jaded and cynical but your poem still rocks. Great job.
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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
6th Nov 2013 4:02am
Haahahahaha You jaded ol' Prick (snort) indeed My Friend-I'll be cursing it soon enough- Thank You always Tony (don't eat the yellow snow)
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
Anonymous
11th Nov 2013 3:32am
Man this brought back some memories! ..all bad! haha J/K but it did remind me why I left the snow belt all those years ago. Beautiful yet ominous imagery so skillfully crafted Soul. Now I go up for a week once or twice a decade just to remind myself why I don't miss home sweet home..lol scraping windshields, freezing cold leather seats and cold air from the heater..no thanks!

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re: Re: Baby, it's cold outside
11th Nov 2013 2:13pm
Hahaha-indeed- i envy You :)
i will be forced into the hermit life...the first snow i will enjoy...after it...i'm ready for spring-Thanks for the visit NP!!!
i will be forced into the hermit life...the first snow i will enjoy...after it...i'm ready for spring-Thanks for the visit NP!!!
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
11th Nov 2013 11:09am
"Only one thing remained reachable, close and secure amid all losses: language. Yes, language. In spite of everything, it remained secure against loss. But it had to go through its own lack of answers, through terrifying silence, through the thousand darknesses of murderous speech. It went through. It gave me no words for what was happening, but went through it. Went through and could resurface, 'enriched' by it all"
Paul Celan
Paul Celan
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11th Nov 2013 2:14pm
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21st Nov 2013 10:59pm
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22nd Nov 2013 1:21am
Re: Baby, it's cold outside
14th May 2014 5:54pm
Sullen and almost whimsical. I am swept away in this piece. Thank you.
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Re: Baby, it's cold outside
15th May 2014 11:45pm
I appreciate You reading me Mean.!!!
Thank You for kind words and droppin' by!!!
Thank You for kind words and droppin' by!!!