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Broken hearted <\3
When i think about you i wanna cry. When i looked in to your eyes i felt like it was only me and you on the planet. When are lips touched it felt like i was in a whole new world. When are hands use to fit perfectly i got butterflies in my stomach. But now that you are gone i guess i have to move on but you still will always have a piece of my heart.
Published 20th Jan 2011
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20th Jan 2011 1:15am
Wow, that is deep and that describes almost every girl after a relationship or when something happens like one of them moves or passes away or something. Good job.
20th Jan 2011 5:02am
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20th Jan 2011 5:13am
It's.. alright... A few errors - nothing you can't fix there: "When *our* lips", "When *our* hands *used*"
It really is cliche and not very deep.
Being in a whole new world while kissing, hands fitting perfectly, butterflies in the stomach, piece of your heart.... all are overused descriptions of love. If you want to take it further - be more original.
It really is cliche and not very deep.
Being in a whole new world while kissing, hands fitting perfectly, butterflies in the stomach, piece of your heart.... all are overused descriptions of love. If you want to take it further - be more original.
20th Jan 2011 5:26am
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